It so sad that you lost your wife
I wish I could make the world be a better place. So to cheer you up here is a poem I wrote just for you....
Today you will rise and see how bright it is outside.
Thats life when you loose someone you really care about.
But it is alright.
You will have your time...
To shine like the stars
And be the man who you really are.
Don't worry about a thing...
Because every little thing will be aright..
So thats why you need to cheer up.
Smile and believe in your self that every thing will be alright.
Don't be shy when it comes to love.
Just pray and pray and tough it up.
I know it is very hard on you that you lost your wife...
So here is some strong advice move on thats life
and look up high.
And someday you will reach the sky!
Author notes
I WROTE THIS POEM FOR JUSTIN BECAUSE I KNOW HE IS HAVING A BAD TIME. SO I HOPE THIS POEM REALLY CHEERS HIM UP.READ ON EVERY BODY! READ ON!!!!!!!!!!!
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Well Whoopie,
For an 11 year old, you write very well, and you are obviously a young lady full of passion and emotion.
To the poem - the last verse rhymes and flows well, but the rest doesn't achieve either.
You have gathered from my poem you read that I am very much anti-freeverse ; that is because I believe passionately that poetry should rhyme. If it doesn't rhyme, it should be called prose, not freeverse IMO.
Most of the great poets from the past were rhymesters, and, if you listen to popular music, you will hear some wonderful poetry (EG Paul Simon).
It's difficult to write good rhyme in good rhythm. Most of my own efforts cause me disappointment - there's only the odd one or two with which I'm happy (EG The Pied Piper of Hamelin which, frankly, is blatant plagiarism of Roald Dahl's style!)
The best advice I could give you to improve your writing is to read the old masters. Go to www.oldpoetry.com, and start with Roald Dahl : he was a genius who wrote a lot of children's poetry (and many books, Willy Wonka etc). His poems are brilliant. I love them, even though I'm a grandad. Tommy Tee Vee is particularly good, and very pertinent, having read your profile. Read the one about the pig who gets his own back on the farmer.
Then go on and read other old poets.
Keep writing and practicing, and TRY to rhyme ; it's hard work, but well worth the effort.
One of your own famous old poets, Robert Frost, said "Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down"!
Kind regards,
Robin.
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Is Justin human or a cat?
A cat would not write like that
not write this to a cat cause
he'd have his head buried in his paws
When a cat loses his wife
there is such internal strife
he would not know what to do
if he got this poem from you
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I liked reading this and I'm sure it will cheer Justin up!!!
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my goodness
Thank you so much for this poem!
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