There is turmoil underneath those baby blues
Something few would ever see
A river of emotions that are backed up by a dam of anger, confusion, and defeat
The problems of home tear her to pieces
But, unfortunately, the parents will never notice
When the world is crashing down on you what can you do
For this girl the answer was nothing
For when nobody cares nobody listens
And this is the hell that she was in
She was my neighbor
I could hear the fighting over at her house every night
But, I refused to do anything about it
If I would've been able to muster up the courage I could've stopped it
But, I hid like a coward
I could easily step up now knowing the consequences that she was to face
But, that is now, and I didn't have what I needed until it was too late
How could I've been so naive
She was my best friend and I wouldn't help her
She never asked me for help
But, I could see she needed it in her eyes
She is gone now out of this world
She hung herself out of misery and defeat
But, what still messes with me to this day
Even though she was going through all this
Whenever she looked at me
She'd just smile
A contest entry
- Sing to me, the song of your soul by Sanguinarius.
600 points, ended May 9, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
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What do you think?
Comments
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This is very harrowing and touches a nerve with me because I often wish I'd helped people when I no longer have the power to.
Please can you sign my petition in the contest description and you must be British or I can't judge this.
Peace Georgia
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I'm not commenting and judging yet; I just want to remind you to sign the petition in the contest description and add in your author's comments that you've done so. You must be British to enter this contest.
Peace Georgia
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!ok wow....to start out this reminded of me, but I'm really sorry taht you blame yourself, it's not your fault if some one is going to do that and they have mad up their minds then there is nothing that you can do to change it well written poem...thank you sooooooooooooooooooo much for entering
~*~An Unwritten Truth~*~
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I knew this wasn't going to end happily. I had a shiver up my spine as I read. Like you, I probably would have kept out of it. A lot of people would and how could you know? She smiled and you thought everything was basically okay. Some people know well how to hide these things.
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Only1love4ever-Reply
I only have one small problem. I don't know which topic you are speaking of from the list.
This is a good poem in it's own though. I like how much thought you added and you really took the time to let your emotions show.
Very compassionate, heartfelt, and sad.
Thank you for entering.
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Such a heart crushing lament you have written here, Suffering often visits those who least deserve it, and rarely those who do. Excellent job you have done with this. A song sung from the heart in falling shadows ~Bret~
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