Crumpled sheets of paper do not express desire.
Unfinished, unsaid, undone, doth not define a man.
Shatter a life to bits and pretend to pick up the pieces?
Justice be served and man be damned by God!
Here, now and forever, reap what you sow.
If thy crime be thy sanctity,
stand up, face the waves,as they crash at you feet.
Brave it through, courage is thy sin.
If thy words be cursed, let the curse be evil.
Let it drown in its fervor, what you achieve.
Showdown, right versus wrong, perceived righteousness,
Rest assured, unsurity is thy claim.
Banking on air, fueled by guilt.
Undead through relevance of liability.
Revered by mind and words beyond...
Stand alone, stand upright, STAND!
For uncertain as dark as thy sight may be,
the water shall engulf thy fate.
Water shall recognize soul for soul
Soak thy bone, reveal thy core...to LATE!
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lovely!!!!
hi babie...
beautiful writing.... i can feel ur agony...
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Great write!
"Crumpled sheets of paper do not express desire.
Unfinished, unsaid, undone, doth not define a man.
Shatter a life to bits and pretend to pick up the pieces?
Justice be served and man be damned by God!"
I absolutely LOVED these lines. The last 6 lines were definately good too. They made the poem.
Great job on this write!
=)
-Kati
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WOW!!!!!!!! what a poem!
this write has so musch it it, you almost can't comprehend it all at once. it's kinda' like 'that double edged sword'. damned if you do, damned if you don't. right? but maybe if we didn't sow it so thick, we wouldn't have to reap it so hard... it will all be cleansed by FIRE in the end, not water. (you know, the rainbow). good write. love gypsyfish
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Interesting write. I like the passion you display, here. It seems angry and beseeching by turns. I'm not sure I'm grasping the larger picture, but poetry is a very subjective art. As I was reading I caught glimmers - just small glimpses of...something...I'm not sure yet just what it was, but it was powerful, inspiring...I'll have to think on that for a bit.
I also like the use of older language, ie: thy, thou. This is not used as often as it might be any more, but it adds strength and punctuation to a piece. Applause for that! -
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Thank you so much for your input...I really appreciate u taking the time out for this...thanks:-)
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