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Good Morning!

Yawning in the morning sun,
rising up to taste the warm air
I stretch my leafy arms
into the light spring breeze
to see the growing day.

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This is what I saw, and this is what I feel.

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  • Lyndon gold member
    June 6, 2008
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    Good, except your bright verse ignores the budding, flowering head.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.