Fools they all
would be, to listen
to the unvoiced fear
as it whispers
of the unknown-
Doubt drums its
way into your thoughts
steady smooth beat,
tap.....tap,tap
tap.....tap,tap
Daring you to listen,
give it an audience,
to have it wallow
on the dais of
your mind-
The shadows of the
fear you feel
is the reality
that you
live, should
you listen,breath
held, and know
that-
"Once in a while you'd
be better listening to the fools
for a change."
Author notes
this poem was inspired by the quote at the end of the poem from a song by Corrosion of Conformity called Shelter.
A contest entry
- Some Real Poetry by Lj-.
300 points, ended May 22, 9 entries
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Wow! This is just...wow! Good luck in the contest, I totally hope this wins!! I love it! My favorite part is the "The shadows of the
fear you feel
is the reality
that you
live, should
you listen,breath
held, and know
that-"...
That just about blew me away! Maybe because I can relate to...what my perception of the poem is about.
I love the quote at the end as well, again very relatible for me which...may or may not be a good thing LoL.
Keep up the amazing work, good luck again,
and..see ya! ^_^
xx
V/E
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thank you very much for the words. it means a lot when people like my work,the band is my all time favorite they have got some very good lyrics and some amazing souther/blues/metal. really kicks tail.
thanks.
Grey
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i love the quote and i love how your lines line up the way it lines up makes it idk just better. i like how u pulled this poem out of a quote i think someone who can do that has talent. awsome write keep it up ~brook
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thank you so much, I really appreciate it. glad yuo liked it.
cheers
Grey
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