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A Little Spice

In syrup coated moments,
when the world is at it's best,
do I walk around parading in fine satin
or string vest?

 

Can I hear the birds all trilling,
in their choral jamboree,
or are the  words we utter
hiding secrets we can't see?

 

In this glorious assortment
of good food and such fine wines,
do we hurry with our mealtimes
or together pass the time?

 

As the ticking gets much closer,
as the hourglass comes to pass,
shall we reminisce with pleasure
or reduce the memories past?

 

In my softly coated moments,
I take off my old string vest,
and parade around with pleasure
with my satin fleecelined chest.

 

Now you might think I am crazy,
with my talk of all things nice,
but the world is topsy-turvy
and it helps to add some spice.....

 

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  • spirit rising
    February 28, 2009

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    this is just a treat!!, thankyou you have just made me smile! the flow in this and the read is just lovely,the last stanza is great too. a very enjoyable read, kind of fitting for the mood i bare today. thanku! x x


  • HisPrincessMaloka
    February 12, 2009

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    Beautiful! I love this write. It's great to add some spice into a world that is so mundane and boring. I don't exactly understand the vest thing but hey, it sounded eloquent so what else can I ask for? Great job.

  • MR Frood
    January 31, 2009

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    nice i like

    its nice to hear of happy things espiccialy in times so dark as it is, as a chef myself i say it is nice to sprinkle on some happy spice or even some slow down and enjoy the moment spice on people every so often huzzah


    • cutiepie gold member
      February 1, 2009
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      Thank you for your kindness...yes, I agree, we do need a little light relief in these times of recession.

  • friend
    November 29, 2008

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    delightful and playful and the wink at the end is cute. made me grin reading it.

  • piccola
    November 24, 2008

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    Nice job. I love that the rhyme and flow are so good and that the imagery tells a beautiful story.

    "As the ticking gets much closer,
    as the hourglass comes to pass,
    shall we reminisce with pleasure
    or reduce the memories past?

     

    (you misspelled the word reminisce ... spell check caught it in my comment)

     

    This is a beautiful stanza. 


    • cutiepie gold member
      November 24, 2008
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      Thank you for the correction. I am afraid I missed it but it is always so nice when someone takes the trouble to point out a mistake. Many thanks for your kindness and delighted that you enjoyed it


  • Never.Give.Up
    November 14, 2008

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    You have my head in a spin form the satin and string... Giggle, I enjoyed reading this I felt like you were writing from the heart.



    I wish you wonderful ideas for the future,



    Rose


  • chilali
    October 21, 2008

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    Wow! I really enjoyed reading this! I love the rhymes very much. They do not seem forced at all. And the words that you used omg! Hahaha. They were just amazing. Like the examples that jadedsnapdragon gave before me! This poem is an absolute delight! Well done! Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading so much more from you!


  • BehindTheShadow
    September 12, 2008

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    I really enjoyed this, great flow, and the use of words that are not overused was refreshing, i.e...syrup, trilling, jamboree, etc. Nice job you have done on this.

    • cutiepie gold member
      September 12, 2008
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      Thank you for your kindness and comments, as always, very much appreciated


  • Meej
    September 11, 2008

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    this is a very sweet poem and i love how straight away it meant something to me. the meaning i got out of this is that we have a choice as to how we enjoy life and we can choose to make it more enjoyable and take the twists and turns in a playful way. great write.


    • cutiepie gold member
      September 12, 2008
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      I often think that life is one big game... Bit like the movie where you open the box and a new adventure begins.... Many thanks for your kind comments, as always, very much appreciated


  • penman gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and with wonderful descriptions. Thank you very sharing


    • cutiepie gold member
      September 3, 2008
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      Thank you for taking the time to read and for also draging out this poem that was written a while back in a quirky mood


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 3, 2008

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    Humm..you made me to think now about the last stanza of your wonderful poem here..very much honest defination and very much thought provoking as well..your flow and the immagery here is just wonderful here..well done..I love it..and my thanks for sharing it with me...


    • cutiepie gold member
      August 3, 2008
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      I have to hold my hands up and admit to a wicked sense of humor This poem is a good platform for a bit of fun Thank you my friend for your support, as always, very much appreciated

  • Bob Fox
    May 9, 2008

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    Now gal

    this is what poetry is all about. This poem says so much and should cause one to stop and think.For time waits for no one. But poetry such as this will last forever


    • cutiepie gold member
      May 9, 2008
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      I think I have my silly head on today Bob...it normally warrents a little humor Glad you enjoyed

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