Truth is a stranger to the cellular store,
Your compass resides deep in the core,
In the one not limited by time or space,
The real you; devoid of race.
Release the truth from deep within,
Bring to the fore sacred sovereign,
And those who resonate with the one,
Recognize the truth of what has come.
But when you speak not from your soul,
The eternal within you is not in control,
And when you finally face your light,
Your inner will tell you “I’m always right”.
Author notes
Please note the title was a stipulation, in the original contest this piece was written for.
A contest entry
- To Thine Own Self Be True by Lotus-Mama.
700 points, ended July 9, 6 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Superb plus
Ah, once again, our spiritual beliefs seem to cross paths. I really like the content of this poem. You consistently express yourself quite well. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. -
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Hello Trafalger679Curious. Thank you for your kind words and compliments regarding this piece. I am glad to read that you found this contained some positives within it. Yeah this piece does have a lovely true message. Many thanks for reading. My regards.
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You are quite welcome, my friend.
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Wonderful
Very creative and wonderfully expressed. Congratulations on the honorable mention
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Hello Penman. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I am glad to read you found positives within it. My regards.
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The truth within , our inner peace and connection with the source, our guiding light through this jungle of manifestation. Ah such a splendid piece you have penned here and of course the source is all knowing and always right
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Hello Gd66UK. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I am glad to read that you found some positives within it. My regards.
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You only won an HM here?
Haha, congrats with the trophy, anyway
The title, well, it may be pretentious but I like it, it's humorous and philosophical!
I've got nothing to critique here because I'm still eating lunch and I don't see any mistakes here ^^
Great write, all in all; I'm beginning to see your beliefs about souls and from the first line to the last line- Bravo!
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Hello PatheticKt. Thank you for reading this piece. The title I had no choice with, as it was part of the original contest stipulation. Yeah, my beliefs about soul are very strong, hahaha. Many thanks for reading. My regard.
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BRAVO
Isn't this the truth...very insightful. This has happened to me...Once...lol.
Another great piece from you...thanks for sharing. Mostly, thank you so much for taking the time to comment on, in such detail some of what I have written. Your comments mean the world to me, especially coming from someone who is obviously talented and full of wisdom. Again I thank you and appreciate you.
Nevadapoet
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Hello Nevadapoet. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. You are welcome pertaining to my comments on your poems. Thank you for your kind words and compliments as well. My regards.
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Release the truth from deep within,
Bring to the fore sacred sovereign,
And those who resonate with the one,
Will recognize the truth of what has come.
I bet you thrashed around for days looking for a rhyming word to go with sovereign, huh?
Kidding, but somehow people do it. This sounds so like something my second ex used to say. Are you an Aries?
Ah never mind. Glad to know you're never wrong. I'm never the sort of person to let it come back and bite you in the whatever for even thinking it in the first place.
How dare you!
jin
Fabulous btw, and I really loved the...hold on...
Release the truth from deep within,
Bring to the fore sacred sovereign,
And those who resonate with the one,
Will recognize the truth of what has come.
The bottom line? The word WIll in the front, does it have to be there?
Just curious. It sticks out.
Other than that, it's wonderful. Smart, sassy. Sassy!
Excellent!
j
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Hello JinSays.
Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. The never wrong is within us all and is true to only ourselves; the write is meant to be stay true to your own soul and thus the goodness that is within the soul, which is the soul. If you choose to follow your flesh/ego you will come undone, and you have only yourself to blame, thus be true to your inner self.
This piece was actually for a contest, and that line was the prompt, and you have guessed the stance all entries had in that contest, mine was different for comparing yourself to anybody else is not the way, for we all on a journey. What maybe right for me, maybe completely utterly wrong for someone else, and of course vice versa, as the journey we are all on are different. No I am not an Aries. Yeah your right though, the word 'will' doesn't have to be in there, doesn't bring anything to the occasion. I will take it out, many thanks.
Once again, thank you for reading and commenting on this piece, and the valid suggestion on improving it.
My regards.
Edit: Forgot to reply to the sovereign remark; no that was easy, for "Within" was the word that needed rhyming to, and if you are from within, you are detached from external stimuli (thoughts, beliefs, views of others, for if your worth is built on the words of others, then once again you are not being true to yourself, and you are looking to appease, please, etc, etc, could go on but am sure you get the message), and are thus sovereign.
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I like this. There is truth to how we always seem to be right to ourselves. The saying trust in your heart can truly be decieving. I enjoyed this it is smooth. However i like my u's spelled out but hey you can do what you want. That is just me. Kudos.
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Hello Forbiddenpriest. Sheessh, first person to mention that, and I have to say I would have changed that if I had noticed it, I like my words spelt out properly as well, hahahah. Nice one, appreciate that. Thank you for the read, and for the kind words, totally agree with you about the flesh/ego. Thank you once again for the correction. My regards.
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Isn't this the truth! Exactly my thoughts, great job!! I really enjoyed this, thanks for entering!!
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Hello Lotus-Mama. Thank you for your kind words and compliments on this piece, as well as awarding me the Honourable Trophy. My regards.
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Another write full of depth and great wording. I especially like,
'But when you speak not from your soul,
The eternal within you is not in control,
And when u finally face your light,
Your inner will tell you “I’m always right”. although the verse before that is also one I enjoyed.
Excellent!
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Hello Aboomer. Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. Glad you enjoyed it. My regards.
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Excellent piece here
So true so true for to be truthful their is never a worry and your laughter and joy is forever heard
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Hello Storiesuntold.
Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece. I am glad to read that you found it an excellent piece. Truth is such an important thing, be true to and with yourself completely, be true to and with other's. Many thanks for reading this piece.
My regards.
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Another wonderful write...
Check out the PO contests when they roll around..I think POD posts tomorrow...lots of rules...you may like it! Unique themes is a must to win...and usually
you can't use filler words..and the to ....list changes....
Take care..
and Write on!
*PEACE*
islekine
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Hello Islekine.
Thank you very much for your kind words. I have noticed the PO contests. I shall look out for a POD posting tomorrow and see what the various stipulations are. Once again though, thank you very much.
My regards.
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Rather imaginative to say the least; Awesome insight roams these parts
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Hello 2Lullabyhaven.
Thank you very much for your kind words and compliments. I thought it was rather a cool novel take on the prompt which was for a contest, which incidentally I did awful in, ahahaha. Anyway enough of my failed exploits. Thank you once more.
My regards.
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Hello Hoodoolover. Thank you very much for your comments. You are right about me stating that the eternal truths are within and expressed by our souls. However we differ in that I am comparing it to the part that a lot of humans think is the real them; the flesh, which is not the real you, for example, traits stored in the flesh have been shown to be passed to others when organs have been transplanted, thus they should not be used to validate truth, for how can they validate your real truth when they are not the real you? I would say more, but I have an idea for a poem, hahaha, so I will stick it in that when I have a chance. Regards.
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I like this, it speaks of how it is so easy to lose the truth when caught up in the trappings of the technical world, not taking time to listen deep within our ownselves, very enjoyable read.
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Hello Pisces Rainbow; Lovelight05. Thank you for your kind words.
Lovelight05; You are welcome pertaining to me entering, it is an interesting competition.
Pisces Rainbow; I am very glad that you love it, and that you find the way it is written as beautiful. As for it being the truth; I am elated it resonates with the real you. I wish you well on your journey.
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I love this write it is simply the truth and written beautifully. God bless
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Interesting take on the title. thank you for entering.
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