As the final caustic rays of the sun
fade to shades of sweet cherry wine
and a sanguine moon welcomes the night
my senses are awakened by the scent of you
Unyielding, I shall devour you alive
with not a thought of mercy my dear
the acrid scent of sweat rising
spiraling into the cool evening air
Your body bathed in silver moonlight
each tiny drop of perspiration, glistening
like the brilliant stars that blanket the sky
Your taste is enticing as I consume you
Exploding in heated passion , animalistic desire takes over
as I partake of this naked bounty that lies before me
then lie panting in raw ecstasy , renewed.
Author notes
~ S AN G U I N A R I U S ~
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF: Night of the Wolf 10 Poets-15 lines-Quickie-RESERVE by Cannonsfire.
400 points, ended May 20, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - erotica!! :D by x-evil cupid-x.
400 points, ended July 13, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"Your body bathed in silver moonlight
each tiny drop of perspiration, glistening"
Now that i found to be special.
But i dont know about you eating me... unless its...
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that was amazing, nice backgroud too btw, ;D
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That made me wants to read even more...
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Erotic, in a odd sense that I rather enjoyed.
Lovely, great poem. I loved it.
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This seemed to come from you naturally...which brings the poem to a whole new level of dark. Great write, this was truely animalistic. Congtatz on the gold as well. You certainly earned this one.
~W.W~
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creates a stronger pulse
satisfies a craving for fire
Desire more
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You definitely bring out the lycanthrope in me
C
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Oh very dark and animalistic! I really like this!! you did a wonderful job with this piece!! you brought some really good imagery here.. Very heated and sensual! well done!And the picture! it just adds more to this wonderfully dark piece!! You have such talent!! well done and best of luck!!
Angel
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Thank you kindly , I had quite a bit of fun with this one ~Bret~
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I can imagine that you would
bravo!
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Ohh Very nice indeed... only a few poetic niggles form me...
I much prefer to see poetry set to the left...and the cliche of crimson made my teeth jangle slightly, as it's a tad overdone in the biting of loving flesh thing..
but other than that, this was has a certain Rawwwrr to it, that could any fair maiden's heart leaping a little, even mine.... if i wasn't already taken by the most handsome guy, who i love dearly..
but yes - swoon worthy stuff... shall endeavour to read more...
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Wow
Ok you had me from the first line lol sheesh...if this is what I am going to get I am going to take ages to get this just right! 
Love, C
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Ok I am editing this in here because I can as the contest holder so forgive me for it being public! 3rd line should be 'senses' but I forgive you for being tired ...try magenta instead of crimson..Gil is right it is overused, I do it too lol...blood is red...perhaps 'fade to shades of blood wine' Gives it a feel of the syrupy thickness and sweetness of blood enjoyed in ecstacy...ok now I am getting carried away and I will blame Gil again for that!
Love, Chez
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Okay, I have revised quite abit of this now that I am more awake
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A very good revision, even flows better but still gets the heart pumping from this end
Love, Chez
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