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last pictures





The last picture of my grandmother and myself was taken in her room

at the home. I curled her hair and on our way out for milkshakes, I did

the quick, one-armed stretch with my cheap camera, hoping we’d both

be in the frame. The picture is blurry, but turned out to be my favorite

of us together. After her death, the blurriness seems barely noticeable,

like her last breath escaping slowly. A low wind, I hear it still, rustling

leaves and see it gently dance flowers on calm days.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Thomas Scott gold member
    June 22
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    A powerful sense of moment

    " ... the blurriness seems barely noticeable, like her last breath escaping slowly ... "


    and bring it down to making flowers dance on a calm day.

    This poem is beautifully woven.

    Luvit.


  • MariGoes gold member
    June 8
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    What you were saying...? Here I see you do well with any kind of theme. Need a hug? A big one from small brazilian arms
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  • dehydrated
    May 28
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    very well done. i liked this a lot, this made me sad sigh... good luck


  • Cerulean gold member
    May 26
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    A fine example of poetic prose.


    Thanks for sharing.
  • iansawicki gold member
    May 22
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  • Harrisham Minhas
    May 20

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    You've depicted your treasured memories very sweetly with vividness.
    Wonderfully expressed.
    Good luck in the contest.



  • myrataal silver member
    May 18

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    So well defined in its blurred beauty ...

    the picture almost an omen of the step-over into the Great Unknown ... but the shared togetherness captured in soft hues, forever framing love ...



    Simply soulfilled, divine Poetess.

  • Nangaleema
    May 16

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    Tara, you have a heightened perception of the world. Devine. The gift of being able to see the miracles in the simple things of life and the ability to open the eyes, hearts and minds of others to those miracles through your words.
    About your grandmother's passing...*hugs*. - NANGALEEMA


  • Pure Thought silver member
    May 16
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    Amazing how the impulsive things we do sometimes last us a lifetime.
    Beautiful.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    May 15

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    Wow, Nice Dedication.

    Beautiful words from your sweet soul placed upon pages so poetically.
    Thanks for sharing, and much love and light my friend.

    -Timothy


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 15

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    Oh my... this is truly a beautiful piece and a tribute to your grandmother! Such a touching write..

  • Yellowdogpoetry
    May 14

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    "like her last breath escaping slowely" incredibly vivid imagery, just incredible. At once, poignant and beautiful!


  • NoIQ gold member
    May 14

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    I have always felt a little cheated that I don't have any memories of grandmothers. Both of mine were deceased by the time of my birth. Likewise, one of my grandfathers died when I was still an infant, so I don't have memories of him either. Just one "gramps."

    Nonetheless, this prose poem had me recalling my own experiences with family, including the recent death of my aunt last fall. The last words I ever spoke to her over the phone were "I love you," and I consider that a precious gift. This work made me re-experience the meaningfulness of such expressions of affections to our relatives, and for that alone it would deserve my praise. That it also is wonderfully wrought further underscores why I applaud.


  • MariGoes gold member
    May 13

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    I think it's the first time I read prose on your page. I enjoy reading very short stories, and yours isn't only well written, but also shows such a tender moment of closeness.
    Very well done dear Tara


  • Moqui Takoda
    May 13

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    You're an accomplished prose writer. This poem almost makes me fall in love with her. You begin with tone and fact, you continue with action and description, you end with sublime heightened prose, which, by the way, is technical perfection.. . i know it is perfect because my heart tells me i have just heard a beautiful song

  • Virgoan
    May 13

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    Beautiful prose! This is obviously a few minutes of effortless silence to write and take a picture of words - a memoir of someone dear, a still life.

    I like how the imagery transgress, and grow until the end. The expressionism is just above par (expected from my dear Tara )

    Excellent - 'I am hands down'.



    HENSLEY


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 11

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    I could tell this was written with no effort at all...just an easy flow of love throughout each line. I felt it, too. You will always be one of my top favorite because you know how to touch the heart with your words.

    Love, lane


  • elemental angel gold member
    May 10
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    So beautiful... touching.
    Bravo


  • phantasyintrigue-x
    May 9

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    How incredibly sad...
    You tell a story entwined with equal parts nostalgia and sadness and manage to weave in metaphors and goodness in prose as well...
    My favorite line-
    "the blurriness seems barely noticeable,
    like her last breath escaping slowly."
    When you make death sound ALMOST pleasant...you know you're a good poet!!

  • faderman1959
    May 9

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    I love pictures and I love this poem! Grandmas are the best gift in the world! I was lucky to have both of mine until only a few years ago. Thanks so much for bringing back such great memories with such a wonderful poem!


  • Xemo-massacreX
    May 9
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    awww this is sad and sweet. Very simple and beautiful. I like it. Great job. =^-^=

  • celadia gold member
    May 9
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    Aw, this is sadly sweet. I loved my grandma, too.


  • Faithbound gold member
    May 9

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    This brought tears to my eyes. I really need to get out to see my grandmother. You penned it just beautiful.


  • paulcreates
    May 9
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    ahhh, her breath depicted as moving beauty. You have such a way with words Tara.
    Paul


  • CaliOkie silver member
    May 9

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    My eyes are blurry with tears. How beautiful and sad. This one really touched me.

    Write about your grandmother, keep the letter with her picture and pass it along to your children and grandchildren so they know who she was, and who you were too. On my mothers side of the family, they have written about themselves and their times for almost 200 years and passed those letters down along with any pictures they had. I feel like I know my great, great grandparents and I sometimes see them in things that I do today. It is nice to know where you come from.

    This is very well written and has a nice flow and rhythm (which I am sure it owes to your poetry). It is so sweet. Thank you for this one. I'm going to go look at some family pictures this evening.

    Garrison


  • Jersene silver member
    May 9

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    This brings tears to my eyes...it's so beautiful and touching. It's amazing how sometimes something that may not be perfect, like a blurry picture, becomes perfect...like the memory, itself. Lovely penning!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    May 9

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    The end nearly made my cry with nastalgic beauty.
    Amazing job here you always so good with your emotional effect.


    Delila


  • EvilKate gold member
    May 9

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    I love how we both wrote on a similar subject but diverged toward completely varied conclusions. It goes to show, just how much diversity can be found in an image.

    Soft and beautifully done - and that finish! - wow


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 9

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    Beautiful... and so very precious: the love, the moment, the memories...and the gentle way in which you've written this.



    ~ Nicolette


  • TN.Joe
    May 9

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    Ah Tara,
    You should have posted the photo. I love to read things like this. To the casual viewer, it's just a picture. To you it's a wonderful memory. Pen on.
    Joe


  • arafura
    May 9

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    "A low wind, I hear it still,
    rustling leaves and see it gently dance flowers on calm days."

    I like the way your heart works poet... You Feel the important things! Good luck in the contest!


  • Pretani gold member
    May 9
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    nice - especially the final three lines.


  • Melodies silver member
    May 9

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    I am glad you were with your grandmother when she left for the next place. a beautiful poem that touches my heart.


  • Namita silver member
    May 9

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    Beautiful beautiful beautiful. This seems more "poetry" to me, than prose. I don't know why. But its immensely beautiful, anyway. Good luck in the contest, you starry starry girl.

    - namita


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    May 9

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    T, that was just so beautiful. What a precious, precious photograph symbolic of such wonderful togetherness. I love how you continued with your wind theme, it works so perfectly here.

    I am truly touched.

    ten


  • one dismal day
    May 8
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    oh. can't read this.
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