Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

Make the Waters Hot

Did you just kiss my nose?
I will take a few of those
One is fine, two is nice
three would sure up the price.

Bubbles flying everywhere
touched me here, touched me there
Kiss the spots they did hit
then in water shall we sit.

Sweet little fun in the tub
is the kind of thing i love.
So come on in and brings the suds,
and i will show you what this does...

A towel nice and wet
twisted perfect now its set.
Where would be a spot to tap
maybe on your arm or on your lap.

Then again if im sitting there
with wild fingers in my hair.
Bubbles will surely fade,
and the towel will drift away.

And you would kiss, all the spots
that are sure to make the waters hot!
And within minutes waves will play,
pull the plug and lets slip away.

 

In reply to this Poem:

 


 

Bubble bath

 

It started off with one or two
All rather small and round
Then six then ten then quite a few
Some settled on the ground

Each on its own looked quite at home
Just floating in the air
But lots of them made up a foam
That's spreading everywhere

A single one has found your nose
Another couple missed
But it is just the first of those
That I think should be kissed.

By: Cricketjeff

Author notes

I planned no writing tonight, but luckily Candace is typing this up for me. This poem is actually a response to Cricketjeffs "Bubble Bath" piece. He was being funny and ah well he got this. I Blame it on the drugs. Jeff I listed you as collaborator cause I just went ahead and placed your piece in with mine. So that way you can see the responses yours brings in, yours was perfect, I was just playing around. If you mind let me know and I shall have it erased when i get back on.
( sorry Jeff, had to do it, but you know i love ya)
I love you all,
Passions

In a list

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 41 of 41

  • daffodilblossom
    November 20
    ?
    Edit | Reply
    u guy rhyme well together wish i had someone like that

  • hahaha stop speaking to me then.


  • firefly53633
    June 26

    Edit | Reply

    Well Penned!

    Very creative both of you! I loved the playfulness and the sultry overtones. Reckless, sexy, delightful work here. Good visuals and great title! Especially loved the second poem! Provocative and genuine.
    Best regards

  • WOW! This takes me to a time, when I shared a special bath, with a special person..that was really nice! This poem is excellent, taking the reader in!!!

    warmest wishes,
    Jeremy

  • Like the created pictures

    PassionsPromise does know the road
    That your name causes some to load
    The pictures you did generate
    Are for many men heaven's gate.

    But Passions road can circumvent
    Adverse feelings that have been spent
    But who knows what you do desire?
    Only want to kindle a fire?

    Note says it's only a reply
    To another's write from the sky
    Of writings that you have found here
    At Allpoetry having beer?

    • LOL thanks for your comment. I appreciate your reading

      • Hello P-P

        Welcome - Hot waters? Water symbolizes physical consciousness and I guess you're attempting to make others (?males?) HOT? Could be you are doing a female thing. I know not. Dennis Pickering

  • Eusebius
    April 24

    Edit | Reply
    Ah, delightful and a ton of fun here! A neat and most nifty poem and a great response of sorts to Jeff's own nifty piece....


  • Flowergirl
    April 15
    Edit | Reply
    very nice th e flow is great i love this work keep up the great work.....

  • poetrynovice
    April 10
    Edit | Reply

    Lots of Fun

    I found this piece to be lost of good, clean fun (pardon the pun). Nice work!

  • J Macabre gold member
    March 29
    Edit | Reply
    That's a pretty good response.
    What can i say...your good at what you write.

  • s.... You go sexy auntie....
    I need to be recurrupted I believe, after reading these lovelies I think I am on my way...


    Delila


  • dabpunx
    March 11
    Edit | Reply
    oh my this was sexy. good times.


  • Eamon
    February 17

    Edit | Reply

    Sweet & Sexy

    Each on its own looked quite at home
    Just floating in the air
    But lots of them made up a foam
    That's spreading everywhere

    A single one has found your nose
    Another couple missed
    But it is just the first of those
    That I think should be kissed.


  • Nanette
    February 6
    Edit | Reply
    Aaah...to sweet. So playful with a hint of erotisism. I enjoyed reading this.


  • Beret55 silver member
    February 5
    Edit | Reply
    That would make the warer hot. hehe
    Very good..


  • geckogirl silver member
    December 21, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    this write has a lot of passion... well done


  • Ellis gold member
    December 5, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I brew beer in my bath tub
    many bubbles, but no soap
    I swim in beer and eat a sub
    I get drunk, but I still cope

    Tiki Cat
    Buy Tiki's Cat Food
    "Too Good For Humans"

  • Bob Fox
    November 1, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    Passion

    Pasion and the hot tub. Bodies intwined and lust abounds. Then perhaps even a laugh and words of love? Oh so very salacious poet.

    • PassionsPromise gold member
      November 1, 2008
      Edit | Reply
      Well Mr Fox, Glad to see you stopped in. For once I smile at your comment. Passion and a hot tub...Indeed makes me smile broader. Fun in the suds is a show of love isnt it?? () Do thank you hon for making my day.

      Passionspromise


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 26, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    this is great.. both of you did an awesome job. .. love your write a lot Tory.. excellent job..

    I love you
    kat


  • Swan song gold member
    August 31, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    oh you two are sooo good lol Excellent !


  • 1stpoet
    May 13, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I like the blend
    could be lots of fun if one does not slip on the splashings on the floor..

    WSD


  • Griswold silver member
    May 10, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Very cleverly done both of you, You know Jeff Tory just has to try to outdo you at every turn. Gotta love her dont ya...Scott Love you Tory...

  • Raven Rose
    May 9, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    you make me want a bubble bath lol... with someone l0ol....i liked it lots lol....


  • Brooklynn Tainted gold member
    May 9, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    damn this is hot. i like the kissing of the nose its playfull and loving. your poem flowed really well and i like how its sexy but no vaulger(i cant spell). this is awsome and i like how u wrote it as a response to a poem u read thats a good way to find insperation of course as long as the other person is game. this is great keep up the good work ~brook


  • Goddess of Discord
    May 9, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    A fun write that makes me giggle with thoughts of bubble bath play time leading to more later on. I like this poem but I did seem so typing corrections needed.

    In line 18 'im' should be 'I'm'
    Through out the piece you flip flop back and forth from the use of a capitalized 'I' to a lower case 'i'. I have no problems with it being lower case but at lease be consistent through the whole poem. Also, the use of the word 'and' towards the end of the poem seem to be over done. Kind of gives it a feel of a runon sentence rather than a stanza.


  • faded dreams
    May 9, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is so sexy. I may have to show it to my boyfriend. I think it would drive him crazy. Well done!!


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    May 9, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    cricketjeffs poem is good stuff, but i truely preferd the reply to it had more bite and the rhymn was really good


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 9, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    how could I possibly object to having my name attached to such a poem?

    Lovely stuff Tory!!!


  • ennovy silver member
    May 9, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Hi honey I see you are in fair spirits, and your writing makes me feel better, and we all miss you. Brazos & I both send our love, prayers & best wishes..to you Tory....we love you, God Blessed you with poetry and your rhyming is awesome....novy

    God Bless


  • Cannonsfire
    May 9, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    lol So nice to read a piece that is just full of fun and rhyme. Good job! Love, C


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 8, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Fun. Good to see a lighthearted write tonight, even if it is just the drugs...


  • poeticweaver gold member
    May 8, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    Bravo

    I can see the drugs are kicking in, and they must be some good ones at that! You two did a groovy job on this fun to read piece. Thanks for sharing, and ah ha, I got to comment first to. I feel special, no where's the little yellow bus. Peace, much love and light, Timothy ~ aka poeticweaver ~

1 - 41 of 41