The sight of you flickered a switch
I remember all the reasons I loved and none of the reasons why I didn't
I remember how you could tickle me like no one else
The weird jokes we had
I remember your smell and all your crazy habits
I know your favorite band and all their songs
I've told you secrets that I've never told anyone else
You were my first kiss and my first love
And sometimes I wonder if I'll ever be completely over you
Whatcha thinkin'
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to be critical
I can feel the emotion u put into this, and see how the persona was close to their lover, but the way you've written it is the way u'd write it off the top of ur head...maybe that is what u did, but I would revise it...
Personally I hate to revise poems that i write straight from my well of emotion... but often when i do finish the revision they become some of the best ones i write...
Anyway... if the persona is yourself, i hope u can get over it, ans things will work out....
Keep the ink bleeding,
Peace and love,
Lost
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aww!
This is an amazing poem! very deep and honestly i didnt quite expected a sad endin! >.<
beautiful! keep penning kays!
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That was really good! I felt like it could be something that I wrote, that's how much I relate...
Te amo,
Chelsie
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