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Mourning Dove



Day break
Flutter of wings
Cooing of broken heart
Singing lover’s song of sadness
Lament

Lonely
Crying from beak
Perched upon branch of elm
Gray feathers watch death interment
Lost love

Weeping
Wails from within
Sobbing woeful wet tears
The passing of souls fills your breast
Forgive

Forlorn
Repeating verse
Painful resonant sound 
Vespers sung to receptive ears
Praying

Pleading
Accepting loss
Remember visions kept 
Swooping drift to your wooded roost
Sunset 

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  • virginwriter
    May 21, 2008

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    Amazing

    I don't know what to say about this, it's just taken my breath away. Absolutely awe inspiring. Each time I read your work I become more enthralled. Sensational!


    • ckwriter69
      May 21, 2008
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      Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I appreciate it greatly.


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL


    Oh Charley, this is so beautiful,the visuals within your written words are soft and flowing.You are so good at writting in this form.Your words reach deep into the heart of the reader.I don't know how I missed this post as I have you on my favs list.I so adore your writes, keep penning such beautiful words my friend, as you have a beautiful voice.Thanks for sharing your heart felt thoughts, I look forward to reading more.
    Take care Charley and many beautiful blessings of happiness to you.
    your loving friend,
    ~Angel~

    • ckwriter69
      May 16, 2008
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      ahhh, thank you so much for your comment Angel, I love using this form. Always appreciate hearing from you.
      Lots of love,
      Charley


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    May 15, 2008

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    Wonderful use of the cinquain to describe the mourning dove. It makes me wonder for whom does the dove cry?


    • ckwriter69
      May 15, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and commenting. These are so fun to do.


  • Scandalous Beauty
    May 14, 2008

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    Absolutely beautiful Charley bug. You have such a way with words. I could feel every emotion. Keep that pen flowing.


    • ckwriter69
      May 14, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it.

  • Scandalous Beauty
    May 14, 2008
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    Absolutely beautiful Charley bug. You have such a way with words. I could feel every emotion. Keep that pen flowing.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    Awww
    This just touches the heart and soul of your reader
    Most poignant
    Many hugs,
    Sandy

  • Bob 42 silver member
    May 13, 2008
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    Oops

    I forgot to applaud

  • Bob 42 silver member
    May 13, 2008

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    Excellent

    If you
    Are mourning deaths
    Mother Nature`s request
    Know these innnocent souls will be
    God Blessed

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