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through my window the breeze reminds me that it rained today
and your other crook
filled
i experienced


i don't imagine intimate

only visceral

exhaling







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  • arafura
    May 19
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    Deep... and very introspective. I love your concepts and the spare structure of your poem. BRAVO!


  • LiesOfDevotion
    May 16
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    i love this idea. and the "i dont imagine intimate..." part is really a brilliant idea. i'm jealous.

    for the first paragraph, i think it might help to have some kind of punctuation, it took a little time for me to get the point.

    all over wonderful.