That night when you stole my innocence, you took control of my life.
Even now, with you locked up in a tiny room, I cannot be free.
As they screamed the word "guilty" through the court,
You pierced me with a stare, "this isnt over".
One last attempt at hurting me.
But as they say, revenge is the sweetest of all things,
For you, we are getting ever so close to the final act,
Your three final words now carved into the bullet.
My sweet darling, the clock is ticking...
Why didnt you just say sorry? And gracefully bow out...
Author notes
Prompt: "You could have bowed out gracefully, but you didnt."
Okay this isnt like what i usually write, but lately ive been doin alot of Quickies, and i actually like this one alot =]
1) I prefer to write dark, sad, often rhyme but lately im becoming more for doing freeverse.
2) I prefer lyrics/quotes as prompts, but sometimes i like pictures aswell =]
3) ap name: nothinglovecantheal
4) Id like to be in a rounds contest, as there is something to aim for, and each new round would be a new challenge, and i love a challenge =]
xx
A contest entry
- Quickie For ALL QUICKIE LOVERS by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended May 9, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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300 points, ended May 15, 2008, 13 entries
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450 points, ended May 23, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
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450 points, ended May 26, 2008, 179 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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Sad write the avenger never says sorry. i like the flow of it. Thank you for entering the contest.
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. I think that you have written a great story telling poem without it appearing to be a story telling poem.
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Congratulations for winning gold in a previous contest. This is a hard hitting piece but the message so simple, sorry is such an easy word, why do they say sorry is the hardest word? If I have done something wrong I am the firt to say sorry. Guess pride and all that crap gets in the way, or the person just really believes they have done no wrong? Sorry for my ramble and thanks for entering.
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That last line was wayyyy too powerful.
It kinda punched me in the gut.
very well done.
Thanks for entering.
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WOW this is a powerful and very strong write ~ I must admit if this had happened to me or my girls I would have the same feelings ~ congrats on your gold this is very well deserved
Thank you also for stopping by my page.
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it works. quite well actually. Remember i=I
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I edited to 'I's =] x
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Ouch!
That's gonna leave a mark! l.o.l. j.k. This is very good, dark but well told and filled with imagery throughout.
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Lovely dark imagery in this poem
Great flow........and we followed you into each line
and verse despite ..the fact we did not know where you
were taking us...cleverly written, and wonderfully
presented....we were her bullets loaded into the gun!
loved it! BRAVO! BRAVO!
ears/Seattle
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A strong write with a most definate twist on the song prompt. Good luck...
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Wow!!!! What an amazing piece! You have told a lifetime's story in these few lines... fantastic sis!! And it relates to the prompt brilliantly!
Love you
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Prompts are up
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Awesome, how long do we have? P.s dont expect any miracles from me
xx
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see the contest page. I fixed it.
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