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if i told you

If i told you a secret
would you tell the world?
or will you hide it
just for your self
would you,
if i would tell
my deepest darkest secret
would you tell
the one, the very one
that would destroy
my little life
if i told you my secret
would you take it
and run with it?
my secret is....

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yes i know it sucks

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  • Eusebius
    June 20, 2008

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    ah, very deft and very, very neat! You've packaged this one nicely....tempting and teasing (remove your silly author notes!) bravo.... bravo....


  • Angel of disaster
    May 15, 2008

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    This poem does not suck, it is actually really good, i likeit, and i can relate to it, just like Xxthe angry said....i really like it, great work.....


  • Xxthe angry gothxX
    May 8, 2008
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    It does not suck... or maybe I should keep at this. I would not be able to do much better. I have been on writer's block for so long wee. I like it... and can relate to it, and you have a very calm appraoch of explaining it...if i were to write about that secret, it would be like this, but more along the lines of vengful, and anger filled. Well done.