Fallen
Like sandcastles taken by a wave
Forgotten without forgiveness
Never to come home again
Decay of a memory,obliviousness
Shattered
Like the glasses of your broken heart
Everything burns till left only the ashes
Dying orchids ask for a new lost start
Silent memories pass by in flashes
Spilled on the floor
Like the red wine of a bloodless moon
Thunderstorms lose my mind in the sin
Fly away wingless angel, rain in June
Love in chains meet my lips, touch your skin
Cold dreams and dry emotions
Broken...Silent...Dead
Author notes
I wrote this in a state of complete desperation and it's one of my faves.
Selene
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AMAZEING
i really liked this write. it was full of strong raw emotion. keep up the exlcent work. i wanted to just pin point one part of the poem that i loved but it was so good i couldn't even choose.
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wow! that was good!! and when u wrote it when u were really dpressed instead of sad trying to get in the mood of being depressed, that just makes it have that much more meaning and emotion. great job!!
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I love this. I want to add it to the semi-finalists list. However, I can't. Not until you add your author's name to your author's notes. Please? Thanks.
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Sorry I just forgot :-s but it's done now. Thanks for the comment
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This was an interesting twist of a piece, thanks for entering.
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This was really good. Its imagery lead the way through the emotions. It was dark and it provoked me to feel what you felt when writting it. It is rare that I find a piece to do that. thank you for entering
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"Fallen
Like sandcastles taken by a wave"...great write, from the very beginning an excellent display of wordplay and imagery. Great dark and moody atmosphere. Enjoyed it much.
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Pretty good
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