Being who you are
Isn’t always a roadmap of conformity –
expectation shackles, drowns
and we are lost.
Doing what you do
Can’t always be easy –sucking demands
feast on fractured minds
until we implode.
but sometimes, just sometimes
I quite like the me
you see, even when the face
is no longer mine.
Author notes
This is very much a first draft, I'm sure it would benefit from redrafting a few times
A contest entry
- Ego stroking by Tattboyspet.
300 points, ended May 9, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything you want by MrCrepsley.
600 points, ended September 10, 2008, 195 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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As we get older, we are less likely to recognise the face staring back at us from the mirror. This is especially true for the very old. Life sucks. And so do I.
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I like.
but sometimes, just sometimes
I quite like the me
you see, even when the face
is no longer mine.
This stanza is my favorite though. Good luck
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Good Job
It's always nice to realize that we can be our own best friend. Nicely done.
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Wow!!!!!!!!
This is really good. Please enter more of your poems. Nice use of language. keep up the good work. if i were you i'd add a couple more lines. In if you are reading this: put a question. Thanks for entering and good luck -
Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Despite the fact that it was a first draft, I thought it was a really good take on the prompt!
I enjoyed this one thoroughly - thank you !!! -
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wow! can't believe this won thank you! as i said it's really a first draft, if i ever get round to reworking it i'll send it to you. thanks for the competition, guess the result is just the type of thing that goes on in my head sometims. cheers
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