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Inside Myself.

I stand before you so alone,

My body a wreck of skin and bone,

My mind is fighting every thought,

My whole being so distraught,

The empty eyes that look at you,

Dejection cuts me right in two,

Dried up tears that stain my face,

No longer part of the human race,

Frustration builds from inner core,

Anguish spills from every pore,

Reaching for that helping hand,

Amazed at how many don't understand,

I wither and die a bit more each day,

My life is in total disarray,

My passion is now an extinct flame,

I sit and play the waiting game,

To see an end to all my tears,

To live when this darkness disappears.

Author notes

Depression! Based on my own experience.

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  • Broken-Bones
    July 11

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    I thought that you captured the feelings and thoughts of depression really well and you conveyed your experience in a wonderful piece of poetry. I could not possibly pick out my favourite line or couplet but i would just like to point out that i thought your opening was particularly strong and really expressed depression well. I also thought that your final line was a wonderful ending. I also wanted to say congratulations on a great rhyming piece, It is a while since i have read a piece that rhymed and this flowed really well. Great Work.

    • mystic-angel gold member
      July 11
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      Thank you for your lovely comment. I can honestly say that from personal experience it was a very difficult poem to write as it bought back feelings and thoughts that I didn't really like, but I am glad that I did it. I just want people to know what depression is really like. Thanks for taking the time to read it and again for your lovely comment.
      Blessings.X
      Mystic-angel.
  • Thank you for entering. The language and language techniques were quiet nice and the flow was good. Good luck in the contest
  • A beautiful job here, it's so sad how many of us live with depression, and others just expect us to snap out of it. Great job with the piece, and good luck in the contest hun.

    -Les
  • wonderful way to describe deppression... I can cope with it in so many ways... good job!
  • Thank you for your much heartfelt and insightful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
  • hazydreams
    May 18
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    Wow

    Love this poem. It is really good. I feel like that alot. Very good read.

  • That was really good.
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