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I Talk to the Wind

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I wrote a sonnet for a flower
she did not understand it
and turned away to face the sun
unknowing

I wrote prose for a fish
that silently disappeared into the
rocks of the shallow pool
unknowing

I wrote a song for an eagle
who drifted off across the sky
chasing vermin below
unknowing

I wrote a story for a swan
who craned her neck to see
what the noise was
unknowing

I wrote a confession for a dreamer
who dreamt of love and devotion
and cracked open one eye
wondering

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Happy Birthday maa

pic: Winter by Katrina Stranger
http://katrinastranger.deviantart.com/art/Winter-71333376

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  • maa gold member
    May 10
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    thank you so much, allen, for your amazing poetic gift you have offered me here ... I am truly touched and appreciate not only the elegance and perfection of form, but also the message contained within your verse ... the formless shining through this most graceful form created by you ...

    merci beaucoup !!!!

    marion


  • MargaretG silver member
    May 10
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    It reminds me of "looking for love in all the wrong places", as all these creatures go their own ways, unaware of attention. But the dreamer is different, there is hope. I like the symmetry in these stanzas, and the refrain with its final change. Don't we all dream of love and devotion? Thank you for this stately addition to our celebration for Marion.


  • a woman to love
    May 9
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    Smiling...gorgeous piece. I enjoyed it!

    Cheerio,
    J


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 9
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    Beautiful!! There is a lot of depth held in those lines! Flowed wonderfully!

  • CandaceVaughn
    May 8
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    I actually like this piece. Watching the words roll over tothe next. Usage of unknowing then a change at the end...Bravo to you. A wonderful piece worthy of gold.


    Candace


  • sunshinegirl gold member
    May 8
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    What a beautiful read this one is! Sooooooo soft and gentle. I think this just about my favorite one from you! I love it!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love my friend

    Nyetta


  • rhondasail
    May 8
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    I love the title of this one..."I Talk to the Wind"...you give the wind a personality, a power that seems unnoticed, but is incessantly gentle and loving...Beautiful gift of poetry and love...I have a mental image of each object you write to as a lovely woman...sort of the opposite of the four evangelists of the bible, except there are five.. ...and of course...the dreamer, is my personal favorite... Peace, Rhonda


  • Amera gold member
    May 8
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    This is wonderful! I am so happy that you wrote a poem for my beautiful and special sister. You wrote a beautiful one too! If you didn't, I would have been mad at you.

    Love,
    Amera


  • PsychoticDemon
    May 8
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    Good Job on this one. I hope you do a Great Job in the contest.
    Loves

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