It all started with my smiles
Life is full of all my love
that will carry me through miles
As I am guided through life from above
Life is full of all my love
I share each and everyday
as I am guided through life from above
in my heart is where this love will stay
I share each and everyday
all the love that I have in me
In my heart is where this love will stay
love should be given away free
All the love that I have in me
because you taught me the right way
love should be given away free
my love is what you are given each day
Because you taught me the right way
that will carry me through miles
my love is what you are given each day
it all started with my smiles
Author notes
I am Sunshine Princess
The theme is smiles, love, me and people who teach me.
There is no punctuation it makes the poem read funny but I know where it should be though
I think this is right I will have my Uncle Mark look at it.
Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first
line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
A contest entry
- For all of you Brilliant young Poets...20 and under.... by islekine.
750 points, ended June 8, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest but don't be mean
Comments
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. love the title. good job. congrats on the trophy! -slick99
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My goodness sweetie!!!
You are trying some pretty awesome stuff!!
This is really great!! I am looking for unique themes..
and you did love....very common as you know...but most entries were on love in one form or another...and since
I believe it is magic ....I am not taking off so many points this time!! Next time I will!!
I know, you know how these contests work...so you will get my final score shortly...as soon as I score one more poem...and see who wins!!
Take care..
Write on!
*PEACE*
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This is great girlie! Wow! You did a great job! I am so proud of you. I love you
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Wow. You did it. Looks right and it looks great.
I am proud of you!
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This is cute poem. You have tons of smiles. The form is a little confusing but it sounds like you had fun writing it.
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I am not sure about this form, but I believe you have done it beautifully. I was entranced by your repetition of certain phrases and how neatly and subtly you make them flow. I am quite impressed because I know it is much harder than it looks and you have surely put a lot of work into in to make it look so easy
Bravo!
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Oh sweetheart this is just beautiful I am not sure if it is right but it is beautiful I am so very proud of you I love you very much
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i like how you put "love should be given away free" its true but i've never looked at it like that. =] great write! and im proud of you for trying all these different forms- its something i yet to do. =] i love you!
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Wow this certainly is a new form of poetry; certainly different from some of your other poems I've read. Very impressive, sweetheart. I'm proud of you.
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oh my you brave the area I don't like to wander...form poetry...lol not good at it, and I don't like to follow the rules you are a talent in blossom never change this...beautiful soul that you are...
you always~ auntie Trisha
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Wow My sweetie how brave and clever you were to try this rhyming scheme Pantoum 'it all started with my smiles' and ended ....with my smiles'
s for you little one and happy smiles
Auntie Libbie x x x
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i luv it!!
heyyy...yeah..its wonderful!
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