When I find a little hideaway
Where you and I can meet
And it's only a short ride away
The thought is rather sweet
I would hide inside my hideaway
And write to you in rhyme
That my tears had all been cried away
In that far distant time
When we met inside our hideaway
And laughed about the World
Of the others who had lied away
Of the truths that we'd unfurled
There's no troubles in our hideaway
Just drop them at the door
All the difficulties died away
We found ourselves once more
No-one else can find our hideaway
It is only known to us
For the prying eyes all shied away
They didn't make a fuss
When we're held within our hideaway
Secure within its walls
Its protection can't be pried away
Safe from anyone who calls
Deep inside me is this hideaway
The you I hold is too
Real love can't be denied away
I'm locked inside with you
In a list
A contest entry
- Rhyming Rumble Round 3 ( part 3 of a 3 part series) by RuthKephart.
1000 points, ended May 9, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congratulations on your HM!
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This one just about makes me swoon
Lovely sentiments expressed here and I absolutely LOVE the rhyme in the 3rd line of each stanza and certainly applaud your effort on that bit Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest
Ruth
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Splendiferous!
The third line in each stanza just keeps your reader breathlessly trotting along waiting to discover another little rhyming gem ~ the lilting melody throughout is wonderful, as is the sentimental value of this piece.
Well done, and a very strong contender. Very best of luck in this contest.
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Okay Jeff, Read this to Tory. SHe loved it. She thanks you for all you do and I needed to see her smile.
Great poem.
Candace -
A lovely romantic write that has the ahhh factor and leaves the reader with a warm feeling.
All the best in the contest.
Sue
xx
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A lovely romantic write here! All cozy and secure...mmmmm.
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so romantic jeff..good luck in the contest..xxx
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This is so sweet, your own little hide-a-way where you feel secure with thoughts of the one you love, no-one can take that away from you. This is very simple and definately from the heart, I enjoyed reading it.
Katie
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Yeah. not bad.
It's what you do best.
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usually, I am not at all a love-poem-lover - I'm as romantic as a kitchen-closet - but this one really pulled some strings ...
I don't hesitate to say that your poem is definitely one of my absolute favorites in this final round - for the amazing rhyme, which must have been hard work for you to come up with (maybe not, since you seem to be a natural ... ), as well as for the wonderful and not at all cheese message in your verse ...
masterful throughout - or how YOU would say now : "not bad !"
marion
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