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moonless (haiku)


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moonless --
the longer I stare
the more stars appear



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  • Marvins
    May 20
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    Concise and meditative. Few words but incisive. Marvins


  • DogFish silver member
    May 13
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    ...very meditative!!!

  • james119
    May 11
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    lovely as usual :)

    I am so glad to find you here Gina

    cheers, James

  • Sestos
    May 10
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    Well, this is wonderful, Gina. Idea and sound captured well.

    • Emerald13
      May 10
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      ok wait ... scuse me .. i mean ... 'thank you' ... lol ...

    • Emerald13
      May 10
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      yay ... finally !
      • Sestos
        May 10

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        you were waiting? hehe, just kidding.

        what makes this, to me, is the turn in l2 and how it all resonates with "moonless"

        • Emerald13
          May 10
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          lol ... oh yes i see how 'finally' translates to waiting ...

          nope ... not that kind of 'finally' ... ...

          happy line 2 translates well for you ... pivots are what i do like to use ... (words/lines and thoughts) >>> GINA

  • Jersene silver member
    May 8
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    This is a lovely haiku...leaves feelings of deep thought in a quiet, contemplative way.


  • Rowan gold member
    May 8
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    Oh, a very thoughtful haiku! Loved this one.


  • Jasmine 1
    May 8
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    Very nice.
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