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The Forever Empty House

 

I drove past the house last night,

I have no clue as to why;

nothing has changed-except

there is a sign now "FOR SALE"

and the drapes have been taken down;

one can see the emptiness now,

the one that always had been there-to me

for not even the furniture had given it life;

nor had your presence-you were the emptiness

devoid of a heart, devoid of a soul, devoid of everything

that makes a person human

and I know now-

a hollow existence can not fill a house,

no matter that there were "things galore"

Your emptiness stripped it of the name "home"

and finally I know now why I always felt the chill

in spite of the fireplace and the sun's rays through the window

on a sunny midsummer's afternoon;

Empty human shells bring on the cold,

I drove past your house last night,

nothing has changed;

It is still a cold empty house;

removal of furniture and drapes

did not make it any emptier;

and today I know why,

You were the emptiness all along

a shell of empty, a presence of cold.

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just rambling thoughts

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  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    May 29, 2008

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    excellent~

    Such sad reflections in this one...
    Love the imagery in this one....
    I always heard it took love to make a home...
    I am thinking this is what your trying to say in this poem....
    Penned oh so excellent
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • yumanbeing
    May 10, 2008

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    emptinesss

    I love this as it brings up the whole concept of home, of what defines fullness, richness, giving, health, vitality, exchange, acceptance -

    Not one of these can be found in this house - which my have a beautiful structure, but empty of the memories that should be found, the type of house one could go back and visit years later - even if owned by others - ask to visit inside for the sake of sentiment - and find no whispers of its beautiful past, no visions or recalled voices of children heard in the wind or the opening of a door - no - just a shell - none of those things that should have been

    I loved this very much - it expresses the pain of what could have been


  • ecrivain01 gold member
    May 8, 2008

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    Oh my Lord ...

    I hope this isn't a true life history story. Unfortunately, it sounds as though it might be.

    Anyway, it's an intriguing write, and you've handled the premise well.


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      May 9, 2008
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      thank you ever so much, and unfortunately your instincts are correct...it is truth as I see and felt it [but on the bright side] it is not MY house or one that I ever lived in] just one where due to circumstances I visited too frequently for my own well being, thx again
      z
      reenie


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    May 8, 2008

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    Beautiful write my dear...
    Sad reflections of truth...smiles
    A house full of things never makes it a home...
    Wonderful rambling thoughts placed to paper.
    Many blessings to you and your winged family...
    ~A~


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      May 9, 2008
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      thank you for reading and commenting, as well as for the blessings for all of us [including the winged ones] After all they are in charge here or so they like to think
      z
      reenie


  • Rowan gold member
    May 8, 2008

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    Yes, 'things' don't make a home, hearts do. So sad. But so truthfully done.
    Ramble away, hon...


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      May 9, 2008
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      yes....where there are no hearts , there are no HOMES. I need HOMES and fortunately I do have one
      z
      reenie


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    May 8, 2008
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    Very familiar feelings here.
    Houses can be vacant and still be full of people

    nice one!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 8, 2008

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    Rambling thoughts indeed...well, not really...but I do know the suspicions, the denials - that percolate with such thoughts over decades- at times-

    admissions......of what one knew-or suspected- all along- in fact- I would bet not one of us-has not felt this way of someone either now-or of the past.

    but...more importantly...."How are your birds?"


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      May 9, 2008
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      I am sure you do know and I am sure you know what it is that I speak off. Maybe therefore the sabbatical from here as well....the Muse is working with other things to fill that remaining closing chapter of "empty" The birds????? They are helping with their silly antics
      xoxoxoxoxo
      reenie


  • Cannonsfire
    May 8, 2008

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    REENIE!!!!! I have missed you my friend, we seem to slip by and never meet. Hope you are well.
    This piece speaks to me of how I felt in seeing my old house and old life as I left it behind. There was the sadness of what was but there was also the gnawing in my gut of what had never been. The emptiness had always been there no matter how full of me the house had been. It says so much when you can go back and finally say a real good bye. Love, C


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      May 9, 2008

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      thanks sweetie...i have been barely on here [just a few minutes here and there] But what I must say is that even though we do not cross paths a lot....you understood this word by word and line by line. Yes.......a final good bye to something that unfortunately I was part of by circumstance [and it has been time for that final good bye and the rage to subside] and maybe then my Muse will return as well as I can finally breathe and look at that which I have and say "this is and always has been a home"Everyone under this roof makes sure that it is Blessed am I indeed...now...finally
      much love
      xoxoxoxoxo
      reenie


      • Cannonsfire
        May 9, 2008
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        awww z sweet friend, may the sadness not cross your path too often...I do miss you but I know I am coming to the US next year and Tom has promised me he will get us all together, then I can hug you in person. Love, C


  • Quill
    May 8, 2008

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    First off loved this write,brilliant imagery gave way to a tale of love that was never there,in such few words you have a fan in this reader.

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