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Sleep apnea

Missing image

Rubber button lost on calculator
along with substantially large index,
exposes errors like a mute translator.
My philosophy interjects:

"What about ratio of minutes earned
dividing circumference of her waist?"
my thoughts debated; I never learned

the common value of her face.

 

Multiplied by the birthdates wasted

to bend soil for her vegan gardens.

Square roots shot from potatoes, basted.

Overcooked, garnished with pardons.

 

This desktop huddles calculations

in the forms of inked-through papers,

yet I cannot surmise equations

for why I never did shake her.

 

At least grab her by frail frame-work,

putting kinetic to the testing.

But she oft warned me, with same smirk,

"Never wake me when I'm resting."

 

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  • Nothing But No
    May 30, 2008

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    "This desktop huddles calculations

    in the forms of inked-through papers,

    yet I cannot surmise equations

    for why I never did shake her."

    Best full stanza I've read in awhile, the flow was brilliant and it just connected so well. Every words complimented the previous one, every line perfection within itself. Beautiful.



  • transcendental baby gold member
    May 19, 2008
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    Great job!!!

  • I really enjoyed the deapth of this poem that you have written.My thoughts debated;I never learned the common value of her face. this is my favorite words in your poem . Very well written ! Brenda Gae

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  • NeonRose
    May 11, 2008
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    Never wake me when I'm resting....enough said. Clever as always!

  • i realy enjoyed reading your poem. its very interesting and puts the mind to ork.

  • Uniquely-Scarred
    May 9, 2008
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    GOOD STUFF VERRY UNIQUE THE WAY YOU TACKLED THIS SUBJECT MATTER I LIKED IT A LOT


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    May 9, 2008

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    Excellent

    Aye, a fine write, indeed, with unique imagery. I rather enjoyed it just as it is. Thanks for sharing this one.

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  • Elavina
    May 8, 2008

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    lol great write. . .unique in it's wording but then again you always were just that unique. I loved reading it. It made me laugh in places and your flow is nicely done. Good job!


  • aboomer silver member
    May 8, 2008

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    LOL - love your wording in this! Sounds like maybe you are a little 'steamed' from the over-cooked potatoes?........This is outstanding! Love the depth to it.
    best wishes in your contest.

  • ecrivain01
    May 8, 2008
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    Hmmmmm ...

    interesting write. Humorous as well.

    All in all, good job here.

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