Walking in fear, shedding nocturnal tears
as shadows adhere and whispers harmonize in celestial tone,
thunder playing like a trumpet as the angels pray.
Listen to the rhythm of the thunder
here the angels sing…
Tethered wings nor broken bones
shall weather the strings upon my heart
playing the perfect love song.
Feel the vibrations of their hum…
O' listen to the strums, that sweetly play.
Sway too and fro’
To the sound of drifting rain
as tears from the angels continue to pour…
Listen to the rhythm of the rain
hear the angels cry…
feel the vibrations from their elegant hum’s.
Discreetly, accept the invitation of healing excavations.
As angels touch a human soul; from earth you shall no longer grow.
Walk in fear no more sing to the rhythm
of the rain and forget the pain...
Listen to the storm; hear it call your name as the angels
come and wash all the pain away, Feel the rhythm...
Playing in your soul and into Heavens abode you shall flow.
Nocturnal tears, baptizing abrasion
cleansing your soul as the angels carry you on.
Author notes
Still dont know bout this one...The ending is just hanging there. *sighs*
A contest entry
- PIF PROMPT CONTEST by penman.
525 points, ended May 8, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very well done.
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As always you are awesome The flow os this kind of gently moves faster and slowly It seems to me to have the feel of a waltz I know i am probably just weird but that is what i took from your poem
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creationsfromheart
I missed this to Awesome write Sis Congrats on the Gold The end don't seem to be hanging to me.
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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My only suggestion is the second to the last stanza take the word > all< out as it seems to stifle the flow just a bit....hear it call your name as the angels come and wash the pain away,.....that would be the only thing as far as I can see. It is wonderful though. Reminds me a little of a Biblical hymn...the flow of it. Impeccable as always!
Hope this helps!
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thanks you are right I removed the "all" like it better lol
Yes when I was writing it I was actually feeling it a bit as a hymn as well, sometimes we never know where are mue is going to drag us lol
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