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I Can See it in Your Eyes

I can observe it in your eyes
The way you look at her
Tis the way you used to look at me
God, I long to feel your touch again
I can feel it in your pride
The way you keep her tight in your arms
It's the way you used to keep me in your arms
God, I miss you so much
We had things going to high heights for us
We were not clandestine
We were not nervous
We were not anything but in love
I still have to cry myself to sleep every night because I can only imagine what things might have been like for us
I need pillows all around to make me feel unscathed
And yet, I fail
I fail to see what happened between us
But you too fail
You fail to see what you have done to me
You fail to see the lies I lead on now that there is no us, because I fake myself every day
You fail to see the tears I weep because I miss you so
You fail to see the scars on my arm from making me think I did something wrong and making me full of guilt
You failed miserably, but did not go into a woe state of mind
As for me, I failed and suffered
Are you trying to do this to me?
Did you want me to go crazy?
Did you want me to be like this?
So miserable, full of lies and becoming amazing at making people think she's okay
You've turned me into something I hate to be.
I hate what I've become
I guess what I miss most, is the way you made me when we were together
God, I can't even describe how much you mean to me
I can't help myself anymore
And anyone who tries only fails
The only smile I can wear is very fake
There is no more sparkle in my eye
There is no glitter in my face
There is no happy in my soul
All there is, is the pain you left me with
I've become so reckless with myself because I just don't care anymore
Everyone is always saying “keep your head up high”
But I just can’t anymore
Everything is just so dark for me these days
And I guess I feel like I can’t do anything right anymore because of it
I really hate what I’ve become, and I truly wish I could go back to being happy
But without you, life just is blank for me.
My love for you is reckless

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  • Cerbie20
    August 15
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    this is a really good poem. and i am recently going through this same thing as well.

    There is no more sparkle in my eye
    There is no glitter in my face
    There is no happy in my soul
    All there is, is the pain you left me with

    i feel for you right here the most, because this is how i feel as well. very good job!

  • KleioKalamity
    July 15

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    W-O-W
    this is AMAZING!!
    i love it with every fiber of my being
    its dark and personal and sad and beautiful!
    i just love it :]
    good luck

  • Winters Recluse silver member
    June 5

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    You fail to see what you have done to me
    You fail to see the lies I lead on now that there is no us, because I fake myself every day
    You fail to see the tears I weep because I miss you so
    You fail to see the scars on my arm from making me think I did something wrong and making me full of guilt


    mmmm i love this part the repeating of the you fail to see are wonderfu
  • hipstorian
    June 4

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    WOW

    I feel like Ive been eavesdropping on a very private moment in your life. Very deep enduring words. Emotional powerful, and strong writing, a bit long but was riveted to these words. It seems so personal. dynamic

  • Devient
    June 4
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    "You fail to see the scars on my arm from making me think I did something wrong and making me full of guilt" This piece is amazing, just what I was looking for, something personal, depressing, and relatable! Extremely well done, and I am pleased to have you in my contest . You will deffinately go far here!


  • Redrusty66
    May 21

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    Nice work with great use of wordplay. The piece kept me entertained and interested thoughout. Thanks for the great read.

  • BlackBloodyRose silver member
    May 20
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    wow

    this is exactly how i feel at the moment. missing the little but most important things. good job

  • Sweetangelgrace silver member
    May 20
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    this poem is deep... Feel it inside me and its make me sad.

    ~~gracy~~
  • Craven Rosewood
    May 15

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    oh, man.... you seriously hit a wound.

    deep sympathy, been there still I am, and yet I'm not; my mind is now split but my sanity remains(or so it seems) my soul is there, my body and mind here. A wonderful write.

  • Poetryintheblood
    May 15
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    Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • Rachel21
    May 14
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    i love this poem, its so depressing thankx for entering..really touched me


  • liduen silver member
    May 13
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    I don't see how this fits the prompt at all...could you please specify? This is a wonderful poem.

  • Mr. Seige
    May 7

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    I Love It

    So Full Of Pain And Sadness
    So Full Of Lostness And Hate
    I Just Love It
    This Has To be One Of The Best Writes I Read So Far In My contest
    Thank you so much for entering

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