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fallen

take what light i have to give
  my gentle friend

you are fallen splintered shattered
  scattered all upon the hill

take what hope i have to share
  for your rebirth

roots and limbs born out again
  as skyward green

your absence will be remembered long
  sung among the highest boughs
    from whence you fell

the ancient order of the wood
  will chant your transmigration through
    realms of rain and fog

take what light i have to give
  my heartwood friend

you are returned from whence you came
  drying slowly in the gloom

feel what hope i strive to spread
  throughout your broken form

find a place against the loam
  to spread your leaves again


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  • carmen
    May 19

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    This is sad yet peaceful. What a way to send a friend off.

    feel what hope i strive to spread
    throughout your broken form

    Those are very powerful lines. And I believe they really have the power to do marvels for that soul or spirit. Afterall, we are all connected.

    find a place against the loam
    to spread your leaves again

    And there's no better way to end than that. Like trees, humans and all creation will be born again through the seeds they plant in others.

    This is an awesome piece. Any spirit you will send off with this will find the hope, peace, love and beauty he thought he had lost from falling.

  • CountryCousin gold member
    May 8

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    I like this.

    When you are through with the current contest you are in, you could put this in mine which honors those that have gone on and those that survive. I liked how you did this, no matter the style.