I do not want the American dream
a white picket fence for our little house
earned through my thrift and your hard work
a kitchen for me to bake cookies
and a garage for you to tinker
nor the one from Hollywood
both of us painfully beautiful
with laughter-in-a-can at the forced comedy
situations too cliche and every conflict
neatly wrapped in plastic smile bows
I won't be a pretty princess
trapped in a Disneyland fairy tale
where my sweet and noble prince
sweeps me off my feet with
implications of helplessness
I want our adventure together
to be a uniquely epic tale
where we cast aside our confines
to show and celebrate each other
in authenticity and integrity
I want our emotions to be messy
and our journey to not go as planned
where you meet me at the park bench
to touch me deep inside with your lyrics
as we plan a trip to live in a foreign land
I do not want the American dream
how about a castle and moat planted in the suburbs?
while we ride a tour bus across the landscape
of our life's adventure together
and our laughter will echo through the years
Author notes
This isn't one of my best. Really, it is just a stream of consciousness of thoughts on my upcoming marriage.
Comments
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This made me smile when I read it...especially the ending. I like the way you expressed the idea of wanting what is uniquely yours and his journey, rather then the typical stuff.
For stream of consciousness thoughts, this is very nicely written!
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Very good way to put it. I'm like you, I would not strive for any cliche dream impossible to obtain. But one as wholey uniqe as every person in the world is.
Your words have touched me.
=]
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Loved it
Amen
This is great. I've never heard these thoughts to be put down in words so honestly and beautifully before. Stanza four was definitely my favorite. I feel as if you could work off of this piece to create varying offshoots (of poems) of these ideals pushed on us, each it's own unique piece. Your words relayed endless stories and imagery
As for critique - I thought the last stanza was ironic; you say you don't want to be like the Disney princess, but be treated as such with a castle in the suburbs. Which makes sense I guess, but it took me by surprise initially. Other than this, I can't find anything. I like the title. Great read.
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This is absolutely beautiful! I completely agree here! You made some great statements!!
"in which we both are painfully beautiful"
"every conflict neatly wrapped in plastic smile bows"
"I want our emotions to be messy
and our journey to not go as planned"
Nicely done, poet! Thanks for your comments on my work, I really appreciate it!
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