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The Wishes of Your Teardrops



I
wish
to feel your
words against
my face


I
wish
to hear your
heart, gasping
loudly in the
background


I
wish
your  arms
were entangled
around  my
torso


I
wish
to sense
your    smile
as an extension
of my own


I
wish
tomorrow
to be a repeat
of today


I
wish
for three
seconds from
now to be a
surprise


I
wish
to feed
sugar to your
fingertips so they
dance their dance
til dawn


I
wish
for the
light of your
eyes to discover
parts of me that I
never knew
existed


I
wish
to melt
like an icicle
in an oven


I
wish
to laugh
at nothing in
particular


I
wish
for the
sound of you
just breathing
to suck me up
and set me
away


but more than anything else..


I
wish
I could read
the wishes of YOUR
teardrops and grant
every one







 

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  • echo-ink
    May 20, 2008

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    AWESOME.

    What a creative person you are. this makes me wish i had thought of it. the poem, the emotions, i loved everything about this poem, and even though i entered this contest, i hope you win.i wish i could give you more than 3 but that's all i have. good luck.


  • Folklor
    May 9, 2008

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    THIS IS AMAZING!
    No faults or suggestions whatso ever!
    the structure was so creative literal tear drops falling! and each one crying about a different thing.
    the tears are made of words unspoken, which links to the prompt visually.
    and the ending! WOW!!!!!

    'but more than anything else..


    I
    wish
    I could read
    the wishes of YOUR
    teardrops and grant
    every one'

    you make a platform of words to create the tension and the finale of the most important tear, as if it was the source of the poem. with emotion and impact it was perfect.
    THANKYOU SO MUCH!
    I feel elated reading the words your tears have cried.
    WELL DONE


  • stompsalot
    May 8, 2008

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    this is so sweet! so very original and builds with intensity! i absolutely love it. you are so talented and i truly enjoy your work. you never cease to amaze me with your talents.
    many blessings *stomps

  • abyssal
    May 8, 2008
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    This is touching.

    I also enjoy the little tear shapes of the stanzas.


  • Oleander
    May 7, 2008

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    aww this hits me hard because I started tearing up before I read this and it really seems to have some empathetic feel to it.

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