The crackle of the old valve radio,
They gathered- souls upon a dashboard.
Static pressed between speakers,
Announced war; they laughed cold.
"Weather forecast for tonight; dark.”
The woven voice of silence.
Gunshots fired; echoing,
Crevesses became hearts,
A queen of hearts-
the soldiers declared as they smiled.
Just before they died.
Eyes my hollow reign,
In power there guns swung high,
Never the less played like a computer game-
on pause.
The rain thunder-
between the tears we walked forth,
Determination; the killer.
Just before they died.
The bodies float in a cake of mud,
Eternity resting between bullet holes,
A light over clouds-
christmas carols sing.
Author notes
"Weather forecast for tonight: dark.”
well its not exactly dark.. but wars not a happy place so i hope its exceptable
A contest entry
- Quotes From the Darkness by Noir mariposa...x.
1050 points, ended May 29, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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gr8 piece very well thought in depth
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thanks
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Thats a really well written piece.
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One word,
Speechless.
I envy your writting so much. Fantastic.
I love this one heaps. Keep it up.
Dani. -
Reading this poem I felt it was jurky from the start and didn't really flow but the imaginary of the words made me want to read more.
Thanks for entering and I wish you well in the contest.
Rose -
wow
this is amazing. I REALLY like this one.
great job.
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"The bodies float in a cake of mud,
Eternity resting between bullet holes"
damn good lines right thur!
All in all this was a very well written piece.
Great Job!
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nice work i reslly wnjoyed reading it
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