I hide behind this wooden frame
stiff and afraid to move
to reach out is my aim
but im afraid you would not approve
My inner self so inclosed
to let it out frigthens me
would you be so composed
If the inner me you could see
The wooden frame is the only safe way
from keeping you from running
and shying away
So behind this exterior i shall be
if you ever wanting to look for me
Although you disapprove and disagree
It is my saviour and my safety
Some day i will be comfortable
i don't know how long it shall take
And this exterior i shall disable
and the inner me you shall awake
When that moment comes to rise
please do not be frightened
for i am scared to see your eyes
when the inner me has been enlightened
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt by Lil-Bit Crazy.
600 points, ended May 8, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I've changed the style in this poem, do you think it works?
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Aweesome
Well no wonder you won!lol u commented my poem and it spurred me on to read some of yours and their really really good I really like your style of writing its really emotive without being too fancey and it makes sense!I especially like this poem gd write
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great write, and very intuitive take on what the person is thinking and processing in the picture. keep up the good work!
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Thank you for your lovely words of kindness, i'm glad you enjoyed my piece
Lisa..xx
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i really really feel this... great write poet... awesome job.... thank you for entering and sharing this with me... great take on prompt
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I'm really glad you enjoyed my piece and thank you for awarding me with gold...! I'd love to also hold a Pic prompt contest...so i'll have to go searching for a nice picture....
your picture seemed to tell a story to me...so i wrote what i felt with my first look at it...!
Its only my second time entering a contest like this and i thorougholly enjoyed it..
Thank you...xxx
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this is kind of haunting. it's beautiful. it flowed really well. good job. and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for your beautiful words
I'm really glad you enjoyed my piece....
<3...
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