They do not call me wise old owl for nothing
it's because I've been around so very long.
I do not quite have the wisdom of the masses,
this does't mean I will take a back seat; never.
As a matter of fact the picture that you see
is not exacty true to my floating image there.
But in my eyes you should see the inner beauty.
For that's where dwells all my knowlege pearls.
Perhaps my knowlege is more for thee than I
it just appears to be the way this thing's set.
So to gleen from me, I'd think you'd need time
to fetter out my words of simple complex rhyme.
You'll find that my wisdom most indulges night,
for day light restricts my level and fine insight.
You should not shadow me, but stay at decent view.
And, please not all at once, how's just two by two.
A contest entry
- Wise One by Topaze.
1050 points, ended May 10, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Overlook made up words
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Mixed
there are some mixes in here...
"knowlege is more for thee than I" for instance
and "it just appears to be the way this thing's set." seem to be old and new...intentional?
some mixes of rhyme and free verse - a little difficult to read
LOVE the thought "So to gleen from me, I'd think you'd need time" - my friend John says that relationships are worth everything that's invested - I agree, and I think you do too...
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I am very unpolished, Monsieur, and rarely if ever do I check with thoughts before or after penning, I just write, there's just no telling what you may or maynot find in my work- mixtures hahaahaha those and many other oddities, I'm afraid hahahaha thanks for your sharp eye, however, this may give me pause
lol
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If you are your only (intended)audience for a particular poem, then..."rarely if ever do I check with thoughts before or after penning" this is OK - HOWEVER, if you want to spread the joy around, then... just write...then polish - I try to read aloud if I'm in real doubt - it helps with tone, emphasis, connection... but I can tell you have a tremendous spirit, passion - so write on sister!
I'm looking forward to more
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Thank you kind Sir, I will take all you've just said under advisement, perhaps you have already made me a better writer, let's only hopelol
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Wisdom of the masses? Egads, they have wisdom?
They never call me wise old hoot owl, they do however call me an old Coot.
But seriously, it's a poem filled with subtle wisdom, much like the owl which lies hidden mostly, observing its surroundings.
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I just love how you said the owl lies hidden mostly observing its surroundings-you are so knowledgeable, really, I hope your name's not David, is it? hahaha just a passing fancy, of a memory of a past poet friend I once knew-he was so intelligent-just like youlol
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David, no, lol. We all have those passing fancies. Me smart? I wish! I'm like the owl in that I like to observe, but the owl has brains, I mostly have mush inside my head.
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Hahahaaha that line "wisdom of the masses" somehow sneaked in and well voila, what I have written I have written hahahaha but seriously perhaps I can take it out and replace asap or somewhere near to thatlol
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ah wisdom is good to have, i wish i had some i can t-whoo but i just look like a t-wit a good piece penned
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Come now, Ian, surely you jest hahahaaha
you're the wisest man I knowlol
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Very nicely written piece. Thank you for your fine entry in the contest.
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This stretched me hahaha I know so very little about owlslol
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