Always trying so hard,
to assimilate the pain.
Wondering is it worth it,
or are attempts in vain?
A volcano ready to erupt,
endurance wearing thin.
From day to day agony,
devouring deep within.
Emotions are corrupt,
long cold days tainted.
Colours bleed into one,
scenes are charcoal painted.
Ebonizing each moment,
under heavy inky skies.
For no-one see the real me,
I wear a bleak disguise.
Tangible senses heightened,
biting down hard on revile.
Paper expression fixed,
dressed with synthetic smile.
Author notes
YOUR PROMPT~FROM THE HEART CAME TRUTH, 20 lines exactly.
I want you to write what is on your mind right now...
You caught me on a bad day but was good to let some out.
A contest entry
- Truth.. Quote Prompt.. by Angelflower.
713 points, ended May 25, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Total misery by X-xElectrax-X.
500 points, ended June 14, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is a good write good luck
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wow.. this is really good..
You did a wonderful job! though I'm sorry that you felt this way, you expressed yourself so well.
I really loved this.. You did a wonderful job..
very deep and emotional.. Thank you for sharing and best of luck..
Angel
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Fantastic work! Deep and dark, sorrowful and lonely, well and realistically scripted, with beautiful word choice...
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oh my!
This screams with pain and self loathing
(and it's got such a wonderful background
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sadly, what you write is true and THAT is why I tend to keep other people at arm's length: the more they know you the more ammunition they have to rip your arm off and hit you with the sticky side with
lovely and dark - well done!
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Wow!!! Deep & dark...
Honest, vulnerable & moving...
Captivating in its rhyme, rhythm & flow...
Laced & interwoven with such raw emotion as to leave one breathless...
I love poetry that makes me feel & this did...
Another fantastic & profound write you have here...
Well done!!!
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Oh hun... I'm so sorry you feel this way... I think we must be feeling the same!
This is so AMAZING... so wonderfully expressed those emotions... though it hurts to read...
Much love
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