I'll love you till the day I die
But honest to goodness, I wish I knew why.
You never talk, you make me cry,
You never even say goodbye.
You walk away and leave me silent,
Darn, it makes me feel so violent.
You turn around and hug me tight,
As if to make it all alright.
Then carry on your merry way,
And there's nothing I can say.
I'll love you till the day I die,
But for crying out loud! I wish I knew why.
You never talk, you make me cry,
You never even say goodbye.
You always think that you are right,
Which never fails to start a fight.
I yell and scream and start to swear,
And you just stand there! Not a care.
Then just as I hit a full on belt,
You give me a kiss that makes my bones melt.
You never talk, you make me cry,
You never even say goodbye.
But I'll love you till the day I die,
Honest to goodness, I'll never know why!
You make me laugh, you make me sigh
I love you but I don't know why
You never talk, you make me cry
You never even say goodbye.
You're happy to go for walks on the beach
But even then, you're out of reach
Your beautiful eyes, so distant and cold
Sometimes it makes me feel so old
And then you look at me and smile
Somehow that makes it all worthwhile.
You make me laugh, you make me sigh
I love you but I don't know why
You never talk, you make me cry
You never even say goodbye
You never call when you say you will
And so I sit and wait here still
Then you'll appear, out of the blue
And demand to know if my love is true!
Sometimes I wonder, if I'm wasting my time
In this effort to make you mine.
You make me laugh, you make me sigh
I love you but I don't know why
You never talk, you make me cry
You never even say goodbye.
Maybe it's all the little things that you do,
That makes my love so endless and true
Like when you phone in the middle of the night,
Just to make sure that I'm alright
Or when I awake to find you there
Things like that let me know you care.
So even though you make me sigh
And you never talk, and you make me cry
Even though you never say goodbye
I love you, and I'm pretty sure I know why.
A contest entry
- Prime. Rhyme . Time (Must vote contest) by Legend.
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Comments
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I love the switch you made in the last verse. Very good.
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wow... what a great write. I hung on every word.. the repeated stanza really works, not forced at all. Just a really nice poem.. really enjoyed reading it.
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ah, this seems like this could be some pretty good lyrics, I think he does love you, maybe just doesn't know how you want him to show it, nice write and thanks for entering
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i came across this pretty saying about love in some song.. "Love is the name fondly given to the worst troubles in lifetime".. something like that.. ur poem speaks soo well.. volumes.. good luck dear/..
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awww! it's hard to deal with an mate who is a loner with far away eyes. They can slip away to neverland without moving a muscle, and ieave you alone when you are within breathing distance. You touch me with the words in this one. The repetitions make me think this might be lyrics to a song. ~ Klassy
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Liked the subject of your poem very much and it was filled with emotions! I'm not sure how romantic it is though.
"So even though you make me sigh
And you never talk, and you make me cry
Even though you never say goodbye"
Sounds kind of one-sided love to me.
thanks for entering
darlintlc -
love is lik elistening to every tune you did a very nice job with this it was a pleasure best wishes to you in the contest
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wow you took very good care of this here piece huh i enjoyed this i think you did a very great job good luck you in the contest
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A nicely rhymed poem with a common angsy theme... reading comment I have to agree it is a "man thing" to desire to be the strong silent type... If they only knew...? Good use of repetition to reinforce the theme... I do like this alot!!!
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well,
this poem IS nice, but it is a little... eh.. it flows nicely in most parts, but then in others where it should flow better than the rest it does not, in simple places if you had just taken 2 more letters it would have been okay. i am sorry, but i do not think i will chose this poem as my very favorite, but it might go up there. -
OMG! I keep reading your poems and they have all been amazing. The repetition in this really gives it power. The emotion is 'screaming' from the page. I could feel the hurt in your words. I really love the ending, how it shows that love endures.
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This poem is sure to take gold. It has such true genius and talent. I love it. I hope that those who read it see it for what I have. Great job.
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I really like this and the movement of the relationship and understanding through the poem
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This flows beautifully, and although there are repeated lines, they add to, rather than distract from, the whole. Well done!
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Yup!...it's a man thing ok, and love in all its glorious shades. Very nicely done with lovely flow and rhyme. Well done and good luck in the contest with this excellent entry.
Shaz xx
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My what an evil little creature love can be,Sad to say when i was a younger man i acted in much the same way as this person, must be a man thing (hate to not feel in control.Love the repeated chorus,with its slight line changes. Helps the poem flow along well. A pleasure to have read Good luck in the contest Thank you for entering
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Would make a good song with the repetetive chorus. Have you given that any thought? Good Luck in the contest!
~Von~
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