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Coloured Balloons





balloons



Red,                       

                      Green,   
                             
                                    Yellow         

                                                  and Pink                     
                             
    Purple,
                 
                          Orange,                       

                                        Silver             
                                         
                                                  and Cream

                            Dancing

                      balloons held on string
             
                smiling faces in a crowd ~ clowns

            blow shapes~hearts abound ~ birds on a swing

        ~ hats ~ and swords ~birthday wishes party time cakes and

  swizzles drinks that fizzle and effervesce up your nose pass the parcel ~

  musical chairs ~ hide and seek ~ mustn't peek! goodie bags full of

  treats ~ and lots of sweets for girls and boys ~ with fun small toys ~

    tumble and burst out onto the lawn dancing and rolling laughter

          from all ~ then from one a cheer rose high let

                        our coloured balloons
                !
                        free into the sky ~

                            Yellow,                    !
                              !            !
          Green,
                               
    Orange
                            !             
        and blue
                                      !              !
watch them glide ~                          !

            as away they      !
                          flew  ! ! !


Author notes

This poem 'Coloured Balloons' accompanies my pre written poem 'A Real Party Girl' also here, about my Mum who used to work in a Balloon factory..My Mum is no longer here ..and I found out that she worked in the balloon factory not too long ago ..as I never knew ..but I imagine that she would hae loved this job and imagined what would have happened to the coloured balloons that she made .. perhaps it was this ..'Coloured Ballons' and party time with 'A Real Party Girl'... I enjoyed this thankyou dear Lady for setting this up I think you may have had something in common with my Mum....you in the selling and her in the making of the many shiny coloured balloons Hugs Lib x x

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  • sassykitty
    May 25, 2008

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    how original!

    definitely different, reminded me a little of the lawrence ferlingetti poem 'the world is a beautiful place' clever use of form


  • Lady Altheia
    May 25, 2008

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    I like this a little beter than your other piece. It seems livelier. This could be a poem for children. Thanks for entering my contest.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 25, 2008

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    Humm..this is indeed a mystic in approach and true in terms of its impact for the open mind readers..I love its essence..well done...


  • Elfin
    May 11, 2008

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    WOW I just love this!!!
    as you read through the lines you can see the release of all the coloured ballons as they soar off into the sky. Absolutely breathtaking, I loved it. Val


  • WolfHeart
    May 10, 2008

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    Marvelous!! This made me feel happy and cheered. I have always said that I am one of the balloon people...needing to be tethered to earth because I tend to fly. Very much enjoyed this!!!

    WolfHeart


    • libithina
      May 10, 2008
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      hehehhe a balloon person ~ wonderful ~ so very pleased that you enjoyed this s happy smiles
      Lib x x


  • Dark Otter
    May 8, 2008

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    Yes, yes

    I'm happy for you. The shape is both more balloon like and shows more movement and expression. I love your rework of this. I wish it the best. Thank you for putting a 'childlike' smile on my face.

    • libithina
      May 10, 2008
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      I am sooo very pleased ~ many happy smiles
      and s Lib x x x


  • Dark Otter
    May 8, 2008
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    Creative and unique

    I think its a fun and happy piece. My only suggestion is make it in the shape of a balloon and to use the rugrats background. Some background color would help emphasize the gaiety.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    May 8, 2008

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    libithina

    hehe I saw this contest the other day. You did a great job with the prompt. Nice imagery Good luck in the contest. makes me want to go out and buy some balloons for my kiddies

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    May 8, 2008
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    This is cute

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