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poetry: philosophy: moment (kyudo)

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in my stance I am

a mountain

rooted in the age-lasting

movements

   of the earth

 

my arm and back feel

the uneven pull of the bowstring

the resistance of the lower

the yielding

of the upper bow

   and I guide them

to a flowing singularity of purpose

   earth to mountain

   body to mind

   hand to the fletched arrow

   knocked at my fingertips

eye and emotion along the arrow’s line

 

   then

 

when there is no more thought

no purpose

   loose

(an impulse between lightning

 and the fall of a carnation petal

 a great

 and disregarded thing)

 

the intention

and the action

the thrum of the bowstring

and the arrow’s flying

(inevitable as karma)

the mute embrace of the target

   all are one

 

and complete

within

   a moment

 

 

Author notes

The practice of martial art as "moving meditation" within Zen Buddhism. In this case, the practice of Kyudo, Japanese archery.

My name is Mairi bheag Marasgal

The form I use is free verse. It is not cut-up prose, but rather poetry set free from form, in order to give the writer liberty to use the richness, or economy, of language as he or she feels led. In this instance, my inspirations are: 1) natural rhythms of breath, 2) counter-currents of thought, stilling to the calmness required for the discipline, and 3) the free verse of Lane E Smith, whom I admire greatly.

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Originally an entry for the following contest: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2401941

The object was not to write a beautiful poem about philosophy, nor to fit a philosophical theme into a poem, nor to write about philosophy using poetic devices. The object is to produce something which is good free-verse and cogent philosophy in one. This unity suggested to me the practice of a zen discipline, and the product was a poem, literally, of the moment.

(In kyudo, the Japanese art of archery, the grip is less than half-way up the bow. Pic courtesy of topics on line magazine.)

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  • polly filla
    June 28
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    cool

    The Discipline.


  • Amazira
    June 28
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    Mairi, Mairi!

    All I ever do is learn from you! I will read this enough times to get a good grip on it. And then I will let go and hope to find the target. This critique needs a bullseye and I'm not the archer to find the mark. I will be satisfied today just to be the student.
  • that's my baby.

  • Ithica silver member
    May 8

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    Bullseye!!! I love Archery and have slung many arrows but never hit the target truer than this!!! This is on point, brilliant!!!


  • maa gold member
    May 8

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    wow, I'm impressed ...
    I am very attracted to tir-à-l'arc, like arjuna in the mahabharata ... and there could be no better metaphor for someone who has succeeded to link heaven and earth within herself in the way you so masterfully describe ...

    a gold-winner to me - which will receive its due award in one way or another (and these are no empty words) !!!


    marion

  • Bad Bill
    May 8

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    The harmony of desire, action and result is wonderfully evoked in this cogent blending of Buddhist philosophy and poetry. Deep stuff, handled expertly.

    Bill


  • NeonRose silver member
    May 7

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    I've never even held a bow and arrow, but I could identify with this feeling easily through your amazing words. I'm sure out of this contest..I don't even understand the description!! ** This is one of those times when I say..I don't know anything about (kyudo), but I know what I like!! Bravo, poet.


  • blondone
    May 7

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    Whow... I say this is holds a powerful punch with outstanding imagery I felt the words move me as I read reaching far and near all in a moments time I must say the line that stands out for me the most is

    the intention
    and the action

    first poem of yours I've read and I see I am in for a treat as I move down your pages of writes plus I see we have some fellow poets in common

    Best of luck in this contest


  • Amera gold member
    May 7

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    This is a little deeper than I like to tax my wee brain. I love the feeling of unity with the archer, bow and target becomming the moment. Your free verse is wonderful.

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • forgot the hands together - without it there is no arrowing...

  • gripped me like a fascinated bow. top of the topic - bruised and barrelled in one exquisite transition. a smooth sensation without having to tear the copper out... ~EZB

  • Amazira
    May 7
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    Keep this

    for my next contest. I can see its worthiness. I'll allow it in the appropriate round. I'm taking two weeks off and I'll be back with a seven round multi format. I think you are not receiving my messages. Let me know if any are getting through.

  • more than a touch out of my depth here I'm afraid!
    But it reads well to me so I'll put three targest for you to shoot at!

    • Twannnng... thweep... thunt!
      Twannnng... thweep... thunt!
      Twannnng... thweep... thunt!
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