You swell in extreme, extravagant, rumbustious repose.
Your buoyancy is intense like the scenic thrill of a rose.
I inhale deeply of the multiplied, myriad life inside you.
Entire universes, worlds in themselves, grace your blue hues.
Life flourishes so regally, relinquishing all claims to land.
You keep them all in your expanded, far-reaching right hand.
I need your multiplied rugged, simplistic, intense complexity.
Juxtaposed against land's sometimes drear like propensities.
France, Dublin and Italy has nothing on you; you are the Sea.
Elegant, rarefied, voluptuousness, I revel in your smiling glee.
Tossed in your white billows; mercy me, such ignited water works.
Entire intoxication, royal themes highly expanded; a lover's tryst.
Your heart beats with gigantic, rapid pulse, while I luxuriate,
within your manifold white pleats engulfed, encased, enthralled.
Envied like the haunting memory of a refrain; motion spiralled.
Long remembered, long forgotten, you lie on my minds waxed floor.
Leasing me, pleasing me, I love you so, oh Sea, how you care for me.
The only thing greater than the Sea, is the one who caused it to be.
Author notes
14 reminds me of the Sea I am going to leave this really broad becasue I love the sea.
try avoiding the beach and the seaside life.
just focus in depth on the sea only the sounds, the sells, the colours, the emotion of the ocean, and the emotion of the person under water.
calm and peaceful hopefully but the approach is up to you.
With your language give me movement and onomatopeic words allieration to give the sound of the sea to words, make the poem move
I want to fell like im under water.
'Dapple down waters of the evening'
here are your images to inspire you.
http://www.eikongraphia.com/wordpress/wp-content/wwwbillfossworldcom%20Lg.jpg
http://www.blog.thesietch.org/wp-content/uploads/2007/02/waves.thumbnail.jpg
http://www.atlastours.net/jordan/dead_sea_sunset.jpg
A contest entry
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Thank you for the wonderful trip to the sea. Your words made me feel as if I were there bouncing upon the waves. Great use of alliteration and amazing and vivid imagery in this. I enjoyed how you brought the sea to life in this wonderful write.
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'You swell in extreme, extravagant, rumbustious repose.
Your buoyancy is intense like the scenic thrill of a rose.'
WHAT A FANTASTIC BEGINNING THE SECOND I READ THIS I THOUGHT THIS IS THE ONE TO BEAT!
your rhyme is perfect the image you give is boyant and exciting, reat alliteration and use of rich language that creates depth and meaning to your words.
'grace your blue hues.'
fantastic description blue favorite colour your describing word hues puts into my mnd a rainbow of many blues and you did this in two words go you! as an artist I appreciate the colours your painting here well done.
'Life flourishes so regally, relinquishing all claims to land.'
like the way you bannish the land and the control over the land seeing the sea as a powerful space in the world that should be admired.
'You keep them all in your expanded, far-reaching right hand.'
great personification of the sea with human features tha sea becomes more real and the image of strength is portrayed well.
'Elegant, rarefied, voluptuousness, I revel in your smiling glee.'
A very well written triad a list of fantastic words that describe your image of the sea. well written.
'Tossed in your white billows' great description a juxtaposition to colour with white almost pure and angelic juxtaposed with the force of tosse actions and billows is such a fantastic violent word.
i loved this my favorite part of you poem would be here.
A fantastic piece thankyou for your entry I agree with dora7 you should be in the finalist list well done. this is your best work ever written!
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Wow, what a precious review-thank you so kindly lol -
I have no word's, I'll find some.
A more perfect poem I have yet to read, your beautiful ,beautiful poem should be read by every lover of the sea in the world. You met every single thing asked for. Headed straight to the finals list. I could go on and on, but when I read Folklor's prompt, asking for movement, repetition of emphatic words,the sounds,or as I would say, the speech of the sea, to be IN the sea, you really did make me feel like I was in it with all your descriptions of passion, and exilerating love for the sea. AWESOME -
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Thank you, this is such a beautiful review, wow, I am so excited to get these gracious words, my, my may I frame them? Who knows when I'll get another review like this one lol
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