If to love you more, some mountains I would flip,
I'd dance cartwheels and break my favorite hip.
You'd never doubt that you were loved in-tense.
For you, my love, I'd give up my last six-pense.
Along fluid streams of motionless waves I'd surf.
Just to give our love wings/bring it into birth.
Your lovely songs I'd sing for you in perfect tune.
There'd be no others, for now to others I am immune.
By degrees and by your complex simplistic allure.
You'd have my heart forever, this I know for sure.
I'm like colorful putty in your designer's hand
I make up for you the orchestra; the whole band.
Bottom line and top one too, you're it for this one,
no one else can measure up or touch me; you have won.
And, caused this girl's heart to surrender, tenderly.
Soft shades of moon-light clear our path, succinctly.
A contest entry
- Big Bash for Old Friends and New by ten thousand cicadas.
800 points, ended May 21, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Overlook made up words
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Again, I am drawn to the lightness of this piece. Lots of great stuff here. Thanks for a wonderful entry!
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Nope, I will not overlook made up words, I will relish them. I do it from time to time myself. Hey, Shakespeare did it! (Of course, I'm no Shakespeare!)
A lovely poem. By restating in many different terms the depth of your love, like you did, it has the effect or really portraying the intensity of the emotion, and yet it also retains this light, almost whimsical quality in part. A wonderful entry!
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Wow, thanks so much
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You make love sound quite grand. I like the rhythmic flow.
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Thank you hahaha it is rather grand, hahaha the grandest thing outlol
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well you did say in an earleir poem today that today you would be writing a lot on love and here you are, flapping love's ribbons in the poetry sky not your last six p, surely
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hahahaaha when love calls, I must answer hahahaaha my last everything hahahaha
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