I Saw the Ocean
I saw the ocean’s swelling life roll away,
Even as the lunging surge drew near.
The sun glinted down as the water rose and swayed;
The sounds of crashing waves kissed my ears.
When the tide rushed in, it filled my heart,
Then it ebbed and I felt the fleeting loss,
But ever the ocean will be with me, and we’ll never part
And in my dreams I can hear the combers toss.
I saw gulls and cormorants take to the sky,
Their brilliance marked by the sun’s light,
Light that parades across the waves all day,
And leads sparkling day into starlit night.
I see the land washed clean by the sea,
Yet human footprints and others tell a tale,
For the beach is loved by those such as we,
As our tracks mimic a temporary Braille.
The panga boats and shrimp boats bob over the briny sea,
Painted as wantonly as ladies of the night.
They return with their catch and tie up to the quay
Beating off the seagulls with all their might.
I think the sea is gentle today and the winds are slight,
So let us set sail. We’ll pack a lunch, just you and me,
So our earthbound souls can be one with the light
And we can sit surrounded by the deeping sea.
A contest entry
- Celebrating Robert Browning in rhyme. by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended May 20, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I suddenly feel the urge to head for the ocean just to feel a breeze. Good work, here.
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this is a wonderful poem
it has so much colour
and even passion
i felt the roar
saw the soar
and loved the calm
wonderfuly writen
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This is a lovely poem ...
thanks for entering.
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Nice use of imagery and language in this write. Most enjoyable read.
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this is a wonderful write filled with imagery and creativeness, love the fisrt and 4th stanzas the most!
however they are all very nice. good luck in the contest! And congrats on your first Gold trophy on the other contest!
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Like the imagery
Almost puts me there on the sea. Natural, rhyming flow. Refreshing to read. A bit forced here and there, but not by much. Well done, in my humble opinion.
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isabelwk
HAHA gonna try your luck again I see. Well This one is Awesome. Should need no Luck Dear Hope you do well with this. Good luck
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This one isn't as strong as "Fallacy," but there's still a lot I like about it. I got inspired in Mexico once again.
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