Right from the start i knew we'd have to part.
Everythign about you just makes me want to hate you.
Just turn and walk away i already regret this day.
Everything went wrong I knew all along.
Cant you see your just not right for me.
This is hard for me to say so just turn and walk away.
Evertything just went wrong today, I'm sorry.
Don't blame yourself I rejected you because you deserve better then what i can do.
im having a writers block month so yeah
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I like it
hmm a universal truism that a lot of people feel. It's like a well known secret. I like how you told this stry through adifferent perspective, because everyone writes about how they've been rejected and make people feel sorry for them but you have a way of making the reader understand.
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a piece that is truly from the heart.
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thoughtful write on rejection . .
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This was great
If you're haveing a 'writers block month,' I really can't tell because this was an excellent poem. I loved the rhyme. It was short but it got to the point.
Amazing.
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A few minor typos and I hated the ending
How many guys have heard that before? (LOL) Still, it sounds as if it's from your heart and that's the important part... letting "you" show up in your work.
Well done.
Ken
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