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Tanka Spring

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snow capped old mountain
yields lower snow to spring sun
thawing brings clear stream
cherry blossoms are carried
winding down to open sea

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  • awannabepoet
    July 29
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    Hi Bluesman, long time no see...

    Hmm I do see some nature in here though, oh well I suppose we shall see.


    • BluesMan gold member
      July 29
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      Boy am I an idiot or what?
      I forgot the no nature clause.
      Hehehe


  • sora.
    September 17, 2008

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    eeep this is just delightful!
    the snow, the water and the cherry blossoms combine perfectly.
    brilliant imagery.
    great work!


  • Pollycheck
    May 16, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my short poems contest. If I remeber correctly the tanka should be 5-7-5-7-7. If I am correct on that your count is off a little bit, I get 5-5-4-7-7.


  • Candy6
    May 7, 2008
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    Very nice tanka


  • Samplette gold member
    May 7, 2008

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    A really nice tanka. So vividly seen through your words. I do only count four syllable in the first line. You have time to fix it if you choose. Thank you for entering.
    Sam

  • carole21
    May 7, 2008

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    a nice write for the prompt . . very nature . . liked "thaw brings clear stream" and "winding down to open sea" . . good luck in the contest

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