Everyday my thoughts chase after your whereabouts,
this feels so strange; this passion of remote desire.
Longingly, I lovingly imagine your kiss upon my lips.
Time often vacations as my thoughts of you overlap
into the night's sky by way of another sleepless dream.
How hard is the haunting decision to just love you
in the quiet tones of my life's course, so casually.
When will I develop the nerves necessary to speak?
Am I expecting you to read those subtle vibes alone?
Time is so somber, sleekly, silently slipping away.
Today, I will contemplate another course of action.
I will take pen to paper and capture all of my love
wrap it tight to words of worth, ship it to you via
airmail express and finally breathe that sigh of relief.
For now you will have all of my love at your fingertips.
Which direction will this shoot you into? I don't know.
But, willingly this time I won't rip the letter up before
I release it. Just take my lovely pulse and hold it sway,
waiting upon a response from you that will blow me away;
because whatever your choice, my heart will still explode.
Author notes
'Dont be afraid to tell someone you love them. If you do, they might break your heart. but if you dont, you might break theirs.'
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A contest entry
- SEMI QUICKIE : Love and Affection by Folklor.
525 points, ended May 21, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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WOWEEEE! this has set the barrior quite high. your ending was fantastic. it blew me away
'Just take my lovely pulse and hold it sway,
waiting upon a response from you that will blow me away;
because whatever your choice, my heart will still explode.'
it made me think of positive negative, expolosion is a great word to express extreame emotions, which is what I specifically asked for.
this was another favorite part of your poem for me becasue the words are chosen with precision and care.
'When will I develop the nerves necessary to speak?
Am I expecting you to read those subtle vibes alone?
Time is so somber, sleekly, silently slipping away.'
your triad sibilance alliteration at the end is very sensory and textoral. its wonderful. and the subtle vibes alone is such a good way of describing love games as to what to do.
this is brilliant. faultless.
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Wow, I don't get many of these hahahaa you have just made my day. Thanks
lol
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i love this i think you did a very great job this was a pleasure to read good luck to you in the contest i think yo nailed it
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Thank you so much, I appreciate lol
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aye, if love is in the air then speak it and smile or you may not get another chance with them and then live inside regret's folds. a good poem
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hahaha ah, sometimes it's not so easy
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