I saw you last lying helpless,
on the bed of yesterday’s sorrow.
Giving your last loving caress,
to the weepers of tomorrow.
Your hand reached out to guide me,
as I walked through the silver door.
We talked and you made me see,
all that there is to live for.
You told me of your dreams un- made,
how you wanted to play those chords.
You wanted music to never fade,
and people to hear your words.
I’ve decided to make, that dream come true,
so for you I wrote this song.
saying how much I love you,
and how I promise that I’ll move on.
Every tear that comes falling down,
will ride on the wings of black.
to where someday we’ll sing around,
the day you and I are back.
Everything I achieved was done because of you,
you are my inspiration, my leader and my star.
You’re the person I know I’ll turn to,
When I fear I’m in to far.
Every tear falling from my eyes,
will ride on the wings of black.
Together you and I will rise,
where the music will sing back.
Together on the wings we’ll scream,
words from the deepest of our souls.
You and I will break the seam,
that bound us to our roles.
Till then I’ll sing and play for you,
the songs you wrote to hear.
With your love and strength my voice grew,
so that the world hears it loud and clear.
Author notes
I wrote this for my sister sort of... it's kind of weird..It's still kind of hard for me to talk about...
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that was really really good you have really good ability keep up the good work
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Wow
That is very good, I really liked the flow. It was a great read.
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this is good
where it says:
I’ve decided to make, that dream come true,
so for you I wrote this song.
Telling you how much I love you,
and how I promise that I’ll move on.
might sound better if you change the:
Telling you how much I love you,
to:
Saying how much I love you.
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hmm i wonder who this i just don't know.....britney you know your awesome
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I am adding this to the fianlists lsit. I just wish that i had this kind of talent in expressing my emotions this way. thanks for entering ang I hopw to read more form you soon.
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Striking to the emotions...love the depth of this.
Keep sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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I like it. I almost cried.
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Great!Wow!
Good luck in my contest!
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this doesn't follow my rules by using a line from my contest. I will have to DQ and you can reenter if you follow the rules.
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This was a very touching and inspiring write. I can tell that it is personal and I appreciate you sharing it in this contest. It gave me hope. I have lost a few people that meant alot to me in my life and this was very touching. Good luck in the contest. Thank you again for entering.
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you are very good at rhyming which a may say is a very hard thing for me to do. i appreciate the use of words in such a way i myself can not do.
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Oh my, this is so sad! I can really feel your pain in this poem, and I can sympathise to a degree!!!
Your imagery is beautiful - especially this bit:
"Every tear falling from my eyes,
will ride on the wings of black.
Together you and I will rise,
where the music will sing back."
Thanks for sharing this,
Luck.
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Great write! Rhyme scheme was nice and it flowed. Nice encouragment you shared. The whole poem itself was uplifting and emotional. I can tell this is a somber write because of the special mood you set. I also noticed in your Author Notes that you wrote:
I wrote this for my sister sort of... it's kind of weird..It's still kind of hard for me to talk about...
I have a sister too and she is my inspiration. So I think it's great that you wrote about her. I am still a little bit confused on why you said "It's still kind of hard for me to talk about..." If you need to share it, I'm always listening! Nice work and good luck in my contest!
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Thanks so much... I usually have a hard time sharing my work with others. But when people like you give such words of encouragement it makes sharing such pieces much easier. So thank you
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Your words are very heartfelt and written with such emotion. A beautiful poem and I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing such heartfelt pain within your words.
Bless You,
Sandy
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AWESOME!!!!!
i love this poem the style of it the wording everything!
one of the best i've ever read
anyways I'll ttyl great write
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