I'm caught up, busted - Once I was trusted,
My persona's been thrusted in the dirt and it hurts,
Ego's exert to points unknown,
I'm like a little kid again, un-grown,
Bleeding a stone, artists need tone,
So i'm alone and in need of help,
Truth - when do we know it really?
I mean really, when can we say...,
Say we know who our partners are?
When are things ever taken too far?
What the real story is behind our scars?
We're all liers: no one ever tells the truth,
'Til they're packed full of rhymes and in a booth,
I shouldn't have wrote this shit,
'Cos now I can't finish it.
- The Truth Hurts!
A contest entry
- Truth.. Quote Prompt.. by Angelflower.
713 points, ended May 25, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Whatever..just make it good. [astonish me] by dawn.of.juliet.
1000 points, ended June 30, 191 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I hoestly couldn't write anything else, but i'm pissed off so who cares? LMFAO
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O.O you know.... im impressed... really. from the first couple of lines, my eyebrows were raised and i just kept being more and more impressed as i read on... i can see the complete rawness of this and obviously from your notes i can see that this is pure emotion. i mean honestly im really wowed.. umm wow... lol im speechless..lol sorry
so anyway.. *ahem* lol thanks so much for the entry... and umm good luck placing!
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this was just really amazing!!
I'm speechless actually..
There is so many ways that you could take this and yet the message is so clear! The last lines were really strong and brought the poem together really well thank you very much for sharing this, and best of luck..
Angel
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This was indeed awesome and anyone who really pays attention here will see that there is a lot going on here and it is much deeper than what the words appear initially. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
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Love the rhyme scheme here, a very mixed emotions write, something I can relate to. I do like the ending, made me smile...had many times I've felt like writing that when trying to finish something. Intense and powerful, good luck in the contest
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This was a really emotional piece dom, it said a lot about trust issues that people may have
and how it can frustrate you so much you don't wanna even think about it no more, "'cos now i can't finish it'
some people need to tell the truth to see if people will accept them for who they really are or if they can relate to you....
nice write good luck in the contest
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i loved this, but who knows...
i could just be lying.lol
in all realness, it was really good, and the tone was perfect for the point.
great job,
KNIGHT TIME
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thanks loads man
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i'm lying!
lmao
really - i appriciate the comment thanks man.
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LOL.. that ending actually gave me a giggle...
But there is a deep message in here of the lies told and the masks worn by people... the truth often never told.
Really liked this!!
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Cheers
yeah - but honestly i couldn't finish and was going to back out of the contest but i thought i'd pu those last lines in; see how it goes...thank you very much - Domz
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