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Stabbing fragments...

Missing image

 

 

how strong
becomes ones soul
when life throws everything back...


back on you every insult
you'd thought to forget
forget by just moving...

moving on without
the torture of words
stabbing through some fragments of glass...

glass from a broken picture-frame
disclosing every bleeding wound
over and over again?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 







 

Author notes

Inspired by the wordbank and a song....

http://nl.youtube.com/watch?v=bNvwkyKQiH0


1. WORD BANK : Use 4 or more words in your poem
Glass
Insult
Torture
Forget
Strong

A contest entry

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  • Quiet places
    June 22, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Excellent expression in this poem of chaotic moments. The message is clear and the path is set. Your on the right track. Great job on this piece! Don


  • fathom me
    May 28, 2008

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    Very Intense! A good win J I hope and wish never this for anyone.. maybe in a better way but not this this way..
    Smiles...


  • Ethereal One gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    excellent expression

    Your words express so well, the pain of words said in anger, and the difficulty we have forgetting such verbal abuses.

    Congrats on the Bronze!

    Jeannette


  • catz Moderators member
    May 9, 2008

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    I read this before and thought I'd commented on it... sorry.

    I think you did a super job with the word bank. A very good poem

    Good luck in the contest

    Dee

  • Virgoan
    May 7, 2008

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    'moving on without
    the torture of words'

    very familiar words for all of us, powerful and very well expressed.

    the whole piece just makes me sit down and think and find myself in the arms of your poetry.

    very, very well done

    keep sharing your gift.



    HENSLEY
    a.k.a VIRGOAN


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    May 7, 2008

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    AWESOME twinsy !!!!!
    i love the first stanza! wooohooo!
    best of luck

    Tasha


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    May 7, 2008

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    broken glass as broken dreams hearts lay shattered over and over again...you have real poured the pain out in this one dear sister...good luck in contest, got my vote

  • amysticwriter silver member
    May 7, 2008
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    Good write...wounding words make us stronger...


  • Ephiphany
    May 7, 2008

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    WoW

    this is the most intense piece I've heard in a while around here. Wonderful and heartfelt flow of your expression within this prompt.

    Good luck

    Ephiphany

  • Warrior7
    May 7, 2008

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    This is a great poem, it's sad but you have written it from a woman who has left and conqured happiness. Well written. Thanks for entering

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