Life so filled with longing
daydreams gone undone
music made of moonlight
fading with the sun.
cobweb memories swept away
to clean a dusty heart
Open windows of the soul
Wanting a fresh start.
Too late, too late
the longings call
Threads coming all undone
No more dreams
No more dreams
they've melted in the sun.
Stuck in neutral yet again
in park instead of drive
Feeling dead in heart and head
my soul is not alive.
Music made of moonlight
fading with the sun
Cobweb memories swept away
dreams that died undone.
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pain and sorrow fill the words for the dreams that died undone but stii there is hope of fresh stsrt...nice poem
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I like that. Very good rhymes!
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Dreams that never come to fruition,but thankfully we can still dream,beautifully written.
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This is so wonderful! It's true we often feel we have missed our dreams, but sometimes when we look back we can see echoes of them even if in smaller measure. We accomplish more than we ever give ourselves credit for. My favourite lines are:
' cobweb memories swept away
to clean a dusty heart' This isn't as sad as it seems. Sometimes we have to clean away misconceptions and minor things to see what gold lies hidden.
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'Music made of moonlight
fading with the sun'
The filligree nature of our dreams is fragile stuff indeed. If only we would share our dreams more, maybe the help to make them concrete might be near at hand.
Lovely poem. Thank you.
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Aww! Such a sad and emotional poem! The last line left me wanting more, much more! It was a very compelling and overpowering piece of art. Great job hun!
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Lovely work, the rhyme and rhythm flow smoothly and interlace bringing the reader close while they grasp the moons music swept away in the sun. Longings that will melt before the sun sets. Lost without feelings dreams that pass from view as missing. The feel the reader has is slow deliberate heart moving event over time escapes memories to become, sadily numb without emotion.
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pretty
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This is brilliant!
This is a beuautiful poem, its feelings that we all share and have thought about, this reached the depths of my heart and I felt it tug my heart strings.Beautifully written very emotional to me, a superb write, thank you for sharing this emotional journey.
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I love the part that compares things to a car, that is so great. and the rest of the poem is near masterful. great stuff.
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Life so filled with longing
daydreams gone undone
music made of moonlight
fading with the sun.
cobweb memories swept away
to clean a dusty heart
Open windows of the soul
Wanting a fresh start.
beautiful poem thank you for sharing your poem with the group
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Liked the flow of these lines, the title and the message shared in this poem. Great rhythm and rhyme as well.
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The rhyme and meter are exceptional. Although this has a heavy feel, it is beautifully written, and your imagery just enhances it. Enjoyed!
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Great!
WOW!!! Hey,that is sufficient. Every time I think I have read the best poem ever, you come up with something just as good or better. Love what you do with words.
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just when I think no one reads my efforts, you come along to comment and make it all worthwhile
thank you for reading and commenting.
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