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Mourning Petals

STILL IN EDIT MODE WANTED TO WRITE FAST BEFORE I LOST THOUGHT

the marigold yawning
with her ruffled
angel petals

wanted more than the
orange glow in
her mourning

drought promised
no drink today
she swallowed sticky

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  • ZachP gold member
    June 5, 2008

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    Hood-Wink

    You have a flair for putting a lot of powerful images into a handful of words -- bravo! Simple, and absolutely beautiful, with a well-chosen title.

    Best, Zach

  • Lalulis
    May 19, 2008

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    very nice........

    I loved "angel petals"....nice visual!....although most every line gave a very nice and unique visual..lol
    overall this was a very sad but pretty poem.....
    -Lu