If i ever left, gone.
would you just say its better off this way?
you mean a lot to me.
and you're the only one that knows.
that who i am is just a show.
so sit back.
relax, rethink rewind.
maybe your heart can heal over time.
i don't make promises that i can't keep,
like the people who promised the titanic wouldn't sink.
well i'm not a ship,
and i'm sick of this shit.
i won't say i'll stay if i know i won't,
i won't say that i love you if i know that i don't.
It's not about you and its not about me.
this is about the person i don't aim to be.
i'm not a player and i'm not a fake.
and it's all my fault but i won't place blame.
i love you and i want for you to know,
that i'll be there for you wherever you go.
wherever you go and wherever you fly,
i promise we don't have to say goodbye.
A contest entry
- Best Prewrites From May 2008 by amaranthine lover.
900 points, ended July 1, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really like the rhythm of this piece, but that's about it. The idea of this poem is cliché and there is nothing that sets it apart from everything else and there is lack of imagery to really draw the eye to it.
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hmm. :)
yeah most of my poems are just as shallow. i wrote this for a friend of mine and it means more to mean than nearly anyting else i've done. but the idea of the poem was to say youre my freind, and thats it....so idk.
thanks for the cmmt.D
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OMGOSH! i love this poem so much! its such a sweet, kind and lovely dedication! This almost made me cry tears of jot, a very simple poem yet very impactful! i love the words u use! they just brought this poem to life! Brilliant work! >.<
~Ranji
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thanks:)
it means a lot coming from you.
i've read some of your poems before and i was amazed. again thanks so much.
-nowayap
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