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The Memory

I saw the light fade
Out of those bright blue eyes.
He never took them off of me.

The impact staggered us both
As that word pierced through my head,
"No!"

They took us away
Both to different places.
I knew something wasn't right.

The days didn't matter
For some time after that.
Still, they seem to drag on.

Your face shattered with fear
Is burned into my head.
Each movement sets off a tremor of memories.

He knew what you meant to me,
But still you're gone.....
How?

Could this never ending fever
Finally be beginning to take it's toll?

And why I ask,
Is the moon not as bright as I recall?

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  • BabyBun silver member
    June 19, 2008
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    Great entry good luck

  • puppybella8
    June 16, 2008
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    I loved it. it was very goo


  • TheGangstress
    June 7, 2008

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    This was a really good poem and a nice read. Well penned and excellent flow, except, is there rape anywhere? The actual subject matter is rather confusing, in my opinion.


  • Emotional-wreck
    May 23, 2008
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    nice ending.good luck!


  • Blooming Poet
    May 19, 2008

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    The pain is so evident and so raw and present. Thanks for entering. I really loved the wording and the last 2 lines.


  • Sorrow is the name
    May 6, 2008

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    I Love It

    this Really Flowed Nice
    I Like How It All Comes Up To The End
    And Reminds Me Of Something
    But I Can't Help To Say Words That reminds Me

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