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My Garden of Enchantment

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In my garden of enchantment

blooms the brightest yellow rose

The smiling petals open to excitement

revealing a love that sensually glows

 

Next to the rose on a trellis

lives a vibrant green trailing vine

Its growth moves in radical climbing

up the trellis it flows and entwines

 

Reaching out to space that surrounds

its leaves touch the bright yellow rose

The tendrils of the vines cling to her stem

and refuse to willingly let go

 

The beauty of the yellow rose

is enhanced by the hanging vine

They actually compliment each other

leaving impressions of a sensual kind

 

When visitors visit my enchanted garden

and view the clinging vine and the yellow rose

Admiration for the lovely attractions together

creates and radiates in a smile that flows

 

 

 

 

 

A contest entry

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  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    May 18, 2008

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    beautiful immage...

    ... to compliment a lovely poem with idyllic ideas.

    You have written well and created a sensuality from an exciting walk in a flower garden. That is unique and something to treasure.

    Well done.

  • ecrivain01
    May 12, 2008
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    Oh yes, before I forget ...

    in line 10, it's "its", a possessive pronoun, not "it's" (a contraction of it and is).

  • ecrivain01
    May 12, 2008

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    You might want ...

    to fix this:

    and refuses to willingly let go (refuse to willingly let go)

    tendrils is the plural subject, so the verb does not have an "s".


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 12, 2008

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    I love yellow roses. This is a beautiful walk through your garden, filled with wonderful scented imagery. Lovely entry. Thank you so much and best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 6, 2008

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    perfect for the contest ...Feeling like I was there surrounded by yellow roses..they have a special place in my heart actully as it was a yellow rose I placed on my mothers grave..Wanting to give her sunshine as she was leaving me etc...
    So this piece really touched me...flowed very well and imagery just so there

    Wish you luck in the contest


    Cindy

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